Trance

 

A trance that's what it was alright                 I remember it well, it was November.   that night you asked me                  to your cabin in the mountain. you hypnotized me with                   sweet soft words, then your undivided attention and kisses               as we lie entwined in a lover's embrace, on the bear skin rug yes,by a glowing amber fireplace                all snugly warm as the night winds howled outside the window, and snow                 silently drifted thru~ the chilled night air. I was mesmerized as you reached                 for me so completely and melted under your touch so soothing,I held the moment                 as you turned it into a blissful night of love best of all you wanted me there to stay                  but I had to go at dawn~ and so I did driving home in a trance                              but darlin' I'll be back!

Reviews

[Adrian K. Smith]

It is indeed hard not to read this as if in a trance, the flow and the feel of the words pulling us along on this romantic tale. There remains a casual feel to the polished form presented, that does not let it slip off beyond our reach but rather keeps us within that tempting embrace of a daydream that forms with each new line.

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this is beautiful and romantic now im in a trance well written

[Winter McPherson]

The adventure of your night of passion was penned quite well here......after such a delicious time anyone would want to come back!

[Sheila Kline]

Beautiful! I felt as if I was right there in the cabin to enjoy it all!

[Dysis]

Your imagery is really good. =)

[Ladysue]

Absolutely beautiful, Fran. The imagery was wonderful!

[With Each Raindrop Come..]

Very Beautiful, Lovely write, and i think I have my first finalist!

[Delilah Dunn]

This poem is hauntingly beautiful with imagery that conjures the perfect romantic evening. Lying by the fireplace on the bear skin rug - your imagery is incredibly tangible and warm and it leaves me feeling as though I, myself, am in a trance. Your words flow wonderfully and carry the reader on a romantic rendevous I feel as though I have experienced myself. Wonderful, graceful, warm piece. Thank you for sharing this exquisite work.

[poet2angels (lynda)]

Beautifully written, romantic , soft with a hopeful wave of whisper at the end...

Ty for entering!

Lynda

[The Rock And Roll Cowbo..]

this was so wonderfully romantic... I got lost in the words and read it three times to take in all it's beauty.

[Rain]

Beautifully written. I am not a fan of love poems. But, this was almost cinematic. Your words made it so visual, and of course men are more visual. Perhaps that's why I liked it so much. Rain..