Trance

 

A trance that's what it was alright                 I remember it well, it was November.   that night you asked me                  to your cabin in the mountain. you hypnotized me with                   sweet soft words, then your undivided attention and kisses               as we lie entwined in a lover's embrace, on the bear skin rug yes,by a glowing amber fireplace                all snugly warm as the night winds howled outside the window, and snow                 silently drifted thru~ the chilled night air. I was mesmerized as you reached                 for me so completely and melted under your touch so soothing,I held the moment                 as you turned it into a blissful night of love best of all you wanted me there to stay                  but I had to go at dawn~ and so I did driving home in a trance                              but darlin' I'll be back!

Reviews

[Adrian K. Smith]

It is indeed hard not to read this as if in a trance, the flow and the feel of the words pulling us along on this romantic tale. There remains a casual feel to the polished form presented, that does not let it slip off beyond our reach but rather keeps us within that tempting embrace of a daydream that forms with each new line.

[poetgurl]

This is so good, I enjoyed this. Love the imagery I got with it

[Project022]

Absolutely beautiful, this poem just glows with love. With every line it just got sweeter and sweeter ~

Outstanding job, please keep it up :D

[Fran Marie]

Thanks project 22 so very much appreciate your review on my poetry

[The Slayer]

This is so romantic. This makes me happy to know that there are still some romantic people out there. Not everyone is looking for sex of f*****g, some people want love and want to be able to make love to that person.

[emmajoy]

What a subtly and romantically described night, a trance indeed .. without resource to infinite details. A private passion, hopefully repeated - in your imagination if not for real!

[Poetic Beauty]

I love the last line and this is a very romantic piece that shows the soft side of love with passion. It doesn't have grand details but rather lets the mind form its own vision of what is taking place and that is true stunning work.

[Robin]

I'm in a trance of the memories you have brought back to light

[Patches I'm not so new..]

This was a nice read I enjoyed the poem very much But the ending--- the end line is superpurb! Great ending to a mildly erotic poem

[Sean M. Addams]

like this alot like the romantic light tone of this the detail in this is amazing .. like i've said before you do have a way with words... very nice.

[Rima]

imagination, detail, romantic enchantment, all an A+

[Michael X]

wow, fran, this is stunningly wisping and enchanting in a realistic sense of appreciation and admiration that lends beautifully to the overall tender, heartfelt, loving, cuddling, sweet and passionate, treatured ambience set adrift, like the warmth breath of a lover against the neck, you present such a dreamscape
of wonderment, the reader can't help but be taken to another place and time, I loved the warm wording, skill and metaphorical romancing concepts that are soft as the moon is bright, on a perfect winter night,
you have talent, its always a pleasure to indulge in your creativity my friend