Fair Maiden Rose

Unrequited Love~Rondeau Form~

 

Fair Maiden Rose sat still to pose

donned a silk sheet in lieu of clothes

He smiled with each stroke of his brush

Rose deep in thought, yet she did blush

and wondered if the artist knows

 

her envisioned love for him grows

as a handsome romantic beau

Shy, she remained in silent hush

Fair Maiden Rose

 

Charmed in his presence she arose

Slipping into her silk dress robe

as he applied the paint's last touch

his goodbye kiss revealed so much

he named the painting, she supposed

"Fair Maiden Rose"

 

 

 

 

Reviews

[Beau Maysey]

I like this style, I should try out the rondeau form
Nice poem based on a picture prompt, I like the little love story taking place
If I may ask, did you have a certain meter in mind for it?
Or does a rondeau have a specified meter type?
I like the reference to my name, nice one ;)
(sorry couldn't resist)
Good poem, I enjoyed it!

[Fran Marie]

Thanks Beau~ glad you enjoyed this french poetry form,it's just 15 lines with fixed pattern of repetition ...with a refrain, quite easily done;

[John the Baptist]

Love unrequited is a painful state. We wonder what the artist's kiss revealed to Rose, but the poem leaves it up to our imagination. I have the feeling she never saw him again. Win some, lose some.

[Fran Marie]

Thanks.the kiss revealed that he
wants to paint her again..but then
that's another poem.

[Lisasview]

Good morning, I really loved the feeling in your poem... I am new to structure and I see that this is called Rondeau... I think I might like to try it....I just tried a new structure called NYMPH by Richard, and i really enjoyed doing it... I also loved that you used an old image...I did that for Mothers hand... The image inspired my poem...
Is each line meant to be 8 syllables... except for the last two verses where the last lines are 4 syllables?
I ask because V1 L4 there seem to be 9 syllables...just wondering if that was meant to be? Rose deep in thought, yet she did blush...
Lisa, early morning in Spain

[Fran Marie]

It's a french poetry form,it's just 15 lines with it's a fixed pattern of repetition ...with octosyllable / 4 syllable refrain..i don't see
9 syllables in the line
Rose deep in. thought, yet. she. did blush...how do you get 9?

Thanks for reading

[Lisasview]

Oh gosh sorry.. my mistake... yes I see it is 8 syllables
per line... I do not know what I was thinking...
I think it would be fun to try...
Lisa

[Fran Marie]

No worries..its an easy form
you should indeed try it.🌷

[Lisasview]

Thank you....

[Chris Shaw]

Dear Fran, an older rondeau from you and beautifully penned I might add. Visually charming. Creates lovely imagery. The painter abd his muse, delightful.

Chris.

[Fran Marie]

Thank you dear Chris
for reading I so appreciate
your kind review 🌷

[Davidgeo]

Good god damn you are talented. That poem took objective talent to construct.

[Fran Marie]

Thanks David 🌷for reading
I had fun writing this one

[Davidgeo]

There's not that many who can do that. I really do have great respect for you, this piece and people who can pull of s**t like this. It's beautiful and I think it doesn't get the right attention most of the time.

[Fran Marie]

Thanks again Dave
for the comments it is an old poem
I wrote it 12 yes ago so not many
review it..u don't send out read
requests..i appreciate your reviews

[Davidgeo]

I know... I read it something like a decade ago. I've been on this site for a very, very long time. I appreciate you responding to me. I'm not a good person.

[Fran Marie]

I came to this site in 2007 a long
time for me also..and yes you are
a nice person ..a bit crazy just like
all the poets ..we must be a little
crazy to write all our feelings for.
all to see... haha. Its what we poets do

[Davidgeo]

Fran. I'm afraid if we talk too much, it might get creepy. We are two strange individuals. The things that might come out of us... I'm just f*****g with you, we should collaborate. I bet it would be absolutely delicious

[Patricia Wedel]

dear Fran Marie… Unrequited Rondeau Love poem is so Artistic and Romantic… I felt the Silk upon my Skin and his Kiss upon my Breast. tenderly, Pat

[Fran Marie]

Thanks Dear Pat
glad you enjoyed
I so appreciate 💜

[Patricia Wedel]

I have copied Fair Maiden Rose in my Journal... Someday I may try a Love-Rondeau Form... tenderly, Pat

[Fran Marie]

Ah that's so sweet
The Rondeau is a beautiful
form of 15 lines I'm sure you'll
enjoyed writing this form..🌷

[Betty Hermelee]

poignant love story, as seen in the sitting. She definitely has feelings for the artist, and perhaps he has them for her as well. I like the change of attire and your word perfectly describe the painting. I also liked the rhyme scheme, well done Fran.
Best, B

[Fran Marie]

Thank you Betty for reading
and your kind review..i so appreciate

[Betty Hermelee]

You're very welcome Fran!

[Robert Haigh]

I've only ever written one Rondeau poem, so I know they can be tricky with the limited rhymes at the writer's disposal. This one is nicely done, and the storyline is interesting too. A good one, Fran!

[Fran Marie]

Thanks Robert for reading
and for the review..much appreciated

[barleygirl]

This is a beautifully lyrical poem with a sweet subtlety that's so much better than being forthright. Your flirty suggestive scene is simple, but with a million undertones throbbing for attention! *smile* Fondly, Margie

[Fran Marie]

Thanks for reading Margie..ever so appreciated..;

[Robert Trakofler]

aha! lovely meter, sentiment and flow. Now i want to try rondeau form as well (and i'm a bit jealous of the artist!)

[Fran Marie]

Thanks so vey much
..glad you enjoyed this rondeau;.