VAMPiRES

 

Pale eyes hang on blue faces
   with traces of blood
         they fly in midnight dim
              gaunt faces, which haunt
                               with a devilish grin

 
 Something's amiss
          with their bulging eyes so pale
                     a cried hatred,seldom seen
                                 from within

 

 Oh, they hunger
          beneath their blue vail
                spreading evil
                            they wail in sin

 
Roaming the earth
         their presence means death
                       their power is poison
                              upon parlous stale breath

  
They come thru~night's mist
          amid a thunder storm's rain
               to covet your soul
                        they bare no shame
                               they take control
                                   'tis their deadly game

 
 Beware!
  Do you understand?
              they may come for you,

 

 

     Be Wise!
           Pale eyes on blue faces 
               'tis only a disguise
                     behind lies, fiery red eyes
                                   not at all pale blue

 
 
These blue face flyers
       are ghostly white
           yet,with souls blacker than
                             black,to haunt and fright

 

So beware~the vampires
                   flying at night!
 

 

Reviews

[A LaDy NaMeD D]

O.o This is a good poem, especially for the contest. At first i was wondering what creatures is she talking about. I notice many people have different ideas about what vampires looked like, i liked yours. I liked how there were all these descriptions and then when i figured out what the creature was...i re-read the poem and thought, "Yea...that makes perfect sense." Good Job.

Danni

[Cassandra D.]

Wonderfully created poem.
This is very interesting.

[Thoughts]

nice imagination.......well again a very nice piece of vampire poem.....liked it.......

[Tina Kline]

Great write. I like the imagery you use to describe the vampires. They sound
really sinister and no human would want to come across
one of your vampires. Over all, a really great poem!

[CLUTZ]

Sort of spooky, but descriptive and i knw this sounds weird but i like the format. It's really catchy and sort of pulls me in. very nice

[ShaneBerry]

i like the format and the way you set it up, it seems to me like you put a lot of time and effort into this poem good work!

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awesome

[ShadowHaze]

oooo.. I really liked this, and it seems as if you had a lot of fun writing this! I know I would have. Can't wait to read more of your writing! :)

[Dani California]

This is awesome Fran. And the graphic is perfect.


"They come thru~night's mist
amid a thunder storm's rain
to covet your soul
they bare no shame
they take control
'tis their deadly game"


Great lines, and a frightening thought indeed. Well done!

[Sean M. Addams]

love the darkness in this piece ..... flows is perfect and imagery is great.... nice job on this one.