Universal Plan

 

Atmosphere~ an universal cosmos array
harmonious heavenly bodies
of cosmic force at play
with stars skipping silver dancesteps
'round the milky way

 

Destiny's design, a bright lunar sight
aligned with Venus,so fair
in unison, a magic moon winks bright
amid a midnight sky and velvet breeze,
casting moonbeams 'pon~earth's lofty trees~
our spirit takes flight~ transcending reality

 

A vast welkin sphere of cosmic delight
whence and where it came forth
spinning , spinning, ever spinning
each day into dark night

 

 

 I dwell in deep thoughts

beneath the sycamore tree

thinking to myself, my path of destiny

realizing,I am a child of this universe

no more, no less than the sun,moon and stars above

a part of the universe and all its love

 

A being, an essence steering a dynamic course

attached to destiny's path of men

a spirit of mysterious force

I am of this plan~ a child of the universe

I can only try to comprehend

 

 

 

Reviews

[Rick Puetter]

Dear Fran,

This is a lovely piece. You capture the cosmic perspective of how tiny we are in the universe, and yet we are equals to the stars in belonging all to the same plan. A very nice insight and well executed.

The word "Atmosphere" at the beginning has me puzzled at bit, I must confess, as I don't see how that applies to the words immediately following. Also "transcending reality" caused a bit of trouble for me since the whole piece seemed otherwise to be reveling in reality. So "becoming lost in reality" or "consumed by the wonder of reality" or something to that effect seems a better choice to me.

I have to say that "A vast welkin sphere of cosmic delight" is simply brilliant! Well done. The whole third stanza is excellent, probably the strongest in the poem.

Best regards,

Rick

[C.T. Bailey]

I am completely humbled by your words. This exquisite piece is going into my favorites. I can only see myself as insignificant when compared to the benchmarks that your work has set. How wonderfully composed and thought out. Well done!
Todd

[Tara Jean Olson]

i love this. what a magnificent statement!