Mourning Rain

Ovillejo Form

Sitting in the dark all alone,

I'm home.

Pondering now what I'm to do?

Without you.

Called by God to heaven above

My love.
Swept away from me, my sweet dove.

My tears still fresh as morning rain
Love since you left this earthly plane
I'm home without you, my love.

Author's Note

The "ovillejo," an old Spanish verse form that means "tight
little bundle." "-ejo" is one of our blessed diminutives,
and "ovillo" means "tangled ball of yarn." The last line is
a "redondilla," a "little round" that collects all three of the
short lines. The rhyme scheme is established, but the meter is
at the poet's discretion, although in Spanish the longer lines
tend to be octosyllabic. ( octosyllabic: A line of verse
containing eight syllables)

Reviews

[Mauricio Montoya]

like how this piece comes together, nice work

[Fran Marie]

thanks Mauricio, so very much;

[Lady Glitter]

I really like these lines, "...Called by God to heaven above
My love.
Swept away from me, my sweet dove..."
This verse is short, candid and melancholy. Filled with resignation also. Love the play on words in the title.

[Fran Marie]

thanks, Lady Glitter, so much appreciated;

[WindsorWolf28]

:) amazing. Great job on it.

[Fran Marie]

thanks so much;

[deeps]

Wow this is wonderful, I like this. Quite the different style. I enjoyed it.

[Helena]

Interesting little form this one. Loneliness described so eloquently and beautifully here.
Good job indeed Fran.

Thank you for submitting this little beauty to my contest and for Keeping
the Dream Alive! ~ Helena

[Suelou]

Awwww, this is sad, but beautifully written.

[Fabian G. Franklin]

This was sad and mournful, very evocative...great job.

[Rainbowco]

A fine learning opportunity given in a small but lovely poem. As always well done.

[The Rock And Roll Cowbo..]

having once lost a close love I can really feel this one deep and relate so well... what a very sentimental write.