Midnight Sky~Villanelle

Villanelle Form

 

 

 

Dwelling in sacred thoughts was I

my senses tuned to harmony

Gazing up at the midnight sky

 

A thousand bare stars caught my eye

enchantment reached inside of me

Dwelling in sacred thoughts was I

 

Charmed by a glow,I can't deny

reaping a sweet serenity

Gazing up at the midnight sky

 

Absorbed in moon's dark halo high

my gladdened heart beats blissful glee

Dwelling in sacred thoughts was I

 

As wonders of what,where and why

were revealed so suddenly

Gazing up at the midnight sky

 

Answers on which I can rely

 life's mystery of destiny

Dwelling in sacred thoughts was I

Gazing up at the midnight sky

 

 

Reviews

[Richard🖌]

Gosh, Dear Fran Marie!
Magnetic imagery, alone, renders this marvelous Villanelle a virtual masterpiece of poetical enthrallment … deep and vibrant into my heart's wonder, the senses are filled to the brink by your softly engaging moments beneath the moon's and stars' embrace.
The picture brought to mind "Gothic" — yet, this piece is anything but, and I ached to be there with you, in the night (as you described it) had such a deep, alluring pull on my spirit … excellent poetry often effects me like this.
Brilliantly composed, Fran, you've dazzled with spot-on rhyme, captivating word choices and arrangement, following precisely and faithfully the rules for this amazing form, with but a couple of flow issues in V1L2 and V5L2 where count was lost. V4L2, consider "gladdened".
The depth and originality of your imagination are beguiling, to say the least, and your skills are such to make the boldest poet enviable.

Do I like it? Hah! No, I love it!
Thank you, Lovely Poetess, for sharing You with Us! ⁓ Richard

[Fran Marie]

thanks so much Richard, for reading, and yes, I see what you mean on some count errors .. I will fix that up, I appreciate your review on my poetry and pointers on problem areas...

[Richard🖌]

Thanks, Fran,
How about all the rest I so ernestly and sincerely offered? : )

[Fran Marie]

I love all your comments indeed, always appreciate such sincere and kind words;

[Richard🖌]

Aw, blush!

[Kevin Vorshak]

A very nicely written Villanelle, Fran. You really did the accompanying picture proud with such a complicated form describing the night sky. Bravo!

[Lyra H]

Enchanting...

[Frances O'Neill]

The poem is very well written. The words have a romantic mysticsim there also seemingly being an

unrevealed mystery in verse five.

[Ravenskald]

The dreaming we do when we are not sleeping !
A nice piece of work that flowed well from beginning to end.
Thanks for your entry

~Raven

[The Mad Prophet]

Very nicely done, and congrats on winning my contest. This is a nicely written piece I did enjoy reading. Obvious it's worth a climb on the Ladder of Light. Very well done.

[The Rock And Roll Cowbo..]

beautiful analogy, just like the night sky the future is full of mystery and endless possibilites. Amazing read!!

[Tamme]

I really love this form. Since I finally tackled it, I have found an appreciation for the work that goes into it. With that, I love the theme. Your words describe so well the feelings generated by a big wide open night sky.

[Aria]

First off, I have that same picture in my computer! Lovely picture. As for your poem, I loved the rythym and beat it had. Flowed very nicely and it also had a sense of calming as I read it. Good job incorporating the picture and the story.

[None]

Very beautiful and full of the things that make night so lovely. Good luck in the contest!

[Tara Jean Olson]

i like your style, babe!