^ STORM ^

Classical Haiku / western emotion

 

Wild wind whips, with wet

 

                  Raindrops hammering a tune

 

                                    Where are you tonight?

 

Reviews

[emmajoy]

Finely executed haiku.. the play on words is clever too. You've conjured up a picture, not merely the one you're showing, but, more, with the words you've written.

Great job, beautifully done. Thank you for sharing.

[Spoken]

picture brings power to the words. Love the first line especially definately brings a western emotion. wild free untamed never know where you'll be. A life i'd love to dable in. Great haiku

[PENS FOR PEACE /TJ CALI..]

Great artistic poem! Short but great! Brings up many possibilities and so many memories!
Never found delight in the arms of a cowgirl but I've had the priviledge to have taste the delightful exotic fruits of a few female: school teachers, nurses and police officers in my time but that's all just another tale to be told!
Loved it and your just a great poet!
TIM

[JohnL]

This has the Haiku form which, to me is indefinable. Perhaps it is three seemingly totally seperate lines which nevertheless form a powerful whole. It says a lot with a little; it leaves room to conject; it has an emotional power. I the alliteration at line 1, with th H softened consonant in whips making the line more brooding, more interesting,
John

[Michael]

I would call it a free-form haiku as it has no kigo. It rally matters not thought as it is a thought we have all had from time to time. Really good balance and what guy would argue about a cowgirl in the rain?

Lovely work

[Valorie J. Shearer]

Sweet! It's short, yet says so much!!! Take care~~~

[Tovli]

i just loved this! tovli

[Brianna Brie]

Raindrops hammering a tune

Love that line! This has an energy all its own. Great job!!

[Jane Doe]

I don't usually care for Haiku either, but I really like this piece. It is very provocative.

[Rebecca Chamaillard]

I like it. It leaves a lot to build on in one's imagination. Good job! I'm not a huge fan of haiku, but this is actually pretty good. And you didn't try to rhyme it! Wow!