Burnt Pages

he walked into chapter five

love at first sight; maybe..

it was my story 

but he would end it

I floated into his sleep

as his angelic dream

and became his devilish nightmare

we danced together

through life

but tripped over each other's sarcasm

and indiscretions

by the time the tale

was written 

we burned the pages until

nothing was left but ash

in an ink stained fireplace

     we used to call love

Reviews

[jacob erin-cilberto]

this is one of my favorite poems I have read on this site.
What a terrific metaphor that is sustained so nicely throughout the piece.
the fireplace called love....or as the song went..."Crazy little thing called love"--

the third stanza just blew me away...tripping over sarcasm and indiscretions...

I love it.
j.

[Fran Marie]

Thanks Jacob
s o very much
for such a great review
means a lot to me; I
s o appreciate;

[Relic]

Love is a real strange spell isn't it? You start out with so much hope but things take a turn and the harmony that was once there becomes dissonant.

It happens all the time. It's just a part of life I guess. A sad part.

[Fran Marie]

yes, love is strange
indeed..thanks Tim
so very much;

[Einstein Noodle]

real poetry here Fran! tires hit the road .. and I feel the sting of the burnouts on skin .. well done .. brutal honesty in your protagonist, if she can be called one ... you offer the book, chapter, action (that sarcasm line is killer) and closing with ink spilling on the once romantic fireplace scene ..a keeper for sure, Fran! thanks for sharing!
E.

[Fran Marie]

Im so glad you
enjoyed this one
thanks E; so much
for such an
insightful review
I s o appreciate;
I d o

[Poetic Beauty]

When love sizzles and incinerates because two individuals are not compatible only combustible “we are left with ash and ruin”

[Fran Marie]

yes that's true.
Thanks so much
I do appreciate;

[Chris Shaw]

Terrific use of metaphor here Fran Marie. How sad that something once full of promise should end so sadly. From angel to nightmare, that's some transition. Hope all is well.

Chris

[Fran Marie]

Thanks Chris
I so appreciate
your review on
this one;