Ice

Ya Du form

oh winter nights
casting lights dim
chill bites the air
blinding glare snows
rage there as bitter wind blows

tall pine trees bow
upright; now bent
down boughs, with ice
on un-nice ground
harsh slice of winter profound

soon spring shall come
when you're done~and
you've run your course
no remorse lent
your coarse, farewell winter spent

Reviews

[Richard🖌]

Goodness, Fran Dearest! 🌾

This is one of (if not the) most beautifully rendered Yadu I've yet had the pleasure of enjoying, including my own renditions.😏
In spot-on line counts and rhyme scheme, you've taken poetic syntax, vivid metaphor, the emotional timbre of the season, and unique word-choices, combining them all with your creative poetic voice to create this wonderfully enjoyable piece for our sheer enjoyment. Also, your choice of 7-syllables sings best with the 4-syllable counts of each stanza, far better than 5, 9, or 11, and sets it apart as an aptly interesting finale.
"Farewell, Winter spent", indeed, but soon enough we'll be embraced again by icy arms, like that perfect icebound picture … brrr!

Splendidly done, Poetess … I dearly love reading such well written and presented metered poetry so few today are skilled enough to compose.
Kudos, Dear Lady Fran Marie! ⁓ Richard 🍃

[Fran Marie]

Dearest Richard
Thank you so much
for the grand review
and the kind encouraging
words on this poem
such a great review
coming from you good
Sir means a lot to me ..

[Suzanne Sonderleigh]

Beautiful! I’ve not heard of this form of poetry writing but it shows the feeling you are portraying. I’m afraid my poems sound like something in a children’s book! Great job!

[Fran Marie]

Thanks Suzanne
for stopping by
I a o appreciate it;

[barleygirl]

I truly do hate cold. But here on the central California coast, my idea of "cold" would be laughable to the people who felt the polar vortex this winter! Still, wimp or not, your poem makes me feel the vicious bite of ice & cold & snow in such a hurtful dynamic way. Yet, you finish with a springtime truce, as if to say, lots of benevolent forces bite us in the a*s, but life always gets sunny again (((HUGS))) Fondly, Margie

[Fran Marie]

Thanks Margie
we finally have
some spring days
this past week
in kentucky
but still cool
nights ..
I'm lovin' it;

[Patricia Wedel]

dearest Fran... this Winter chills my body like
Champagne on Ice.... intoxicating poetry to unfold in the tendrils of my mind. “Farewell Winter spent”... We now have a Hint of Spring and a light breeze in March. tenderly, Pat

[Fran Marie]

Awhh yes..spring
is in the air for
sure

thanks dear Pat
I always appreciate
your kind words;

[.]

What a nice poem with a new style, I never heard before this... Really nice with good rhyming to describe a season...

[Fran Marie]

Thanks Sima
glad you liked
this one; the form
is a bit tricky took
me a while to get it
right; I appreciate
your kind words;

[MomzillaNC]

Terrific take on winter. I wish you were in WE PAW Bloggers on Facebook so you could be included in the next group ezine issue -- it's a spoken word poetry prompt for poems on the theme of winter.

[Fran Marie]

Thanks mom for reading
I appreciate your comments;

The we paw bloggers?
I'll try to check it out
thanks for the invite

[MomzillaNC]

Great. If you want to be part of that prompt, the deadline is tomorrow by noonish, my time (Eastern Standard Time).

[Silmara McGarry]

Hey Fran! :-)
Such Beautiful write, I love your work!!!

I have never heard about the Ya-du form before...And you have written so cleverly!

Amazing and well done from me !!!
Hugs
Sil

[Fran Marie]

Thanks All
so.much appreciate
your kind words on
my poem;

[alanwgraham]

Very nice Fran Marie. First off your words paint a fine picture of this wintry scene. Then I haven't seen this form of poem before. It took me a little time to figure out the rhyming scheme which you have pulled off very cleverly.
Hope you are well. Isn't it great to have left winter behind.
All the best.
Alan

[Fran Marie]

Thanks Allen
for your kind
review and yes
s o looking forward
for spring to arrive;

[Relic]

When cold goes away it's always a good day. At least, to me it is.

[Fran Marie]

Thanks Tim
I hear ya..
I'm s o ready
for spring to
arrive;

[Poetic Beauty]

I am definitely ready to winter to disembark and for spring to saunter in. Love the imagery of the trees and ice painted in this poem

[Fran Marie]

Me too I'm
s o ready
to say goodbye
to winter
Thanks Kristina
for stopping by
I appreciate your
kind words;

[Poetic Beauty]

You are welcome