Evil^He Comes~Sonnet

 

 

 

He had weary eyes of a thin disguise

but profound evil lurked behind their mask

Driven by a cold dark force I surmise

damned to perform bold ghastly sins of death

 

Evil, he comes on wings of midnight mist

like the hounds of hell he roams the dark earth

Rising from coffin to give you death's kiss

savoring your blood, 'tis his vampire's curse

 

Oh, that you could flee this evil which comes

and unbound the chains to free your doomed soul

Loring night's evil into morn's bright sun

and perish to phantom dust evermore

 

'Alas, such evils with a thin disguise

possess much power behind weary eyes

Reviews

[The Viking]

"Oh, that you could flee this evil which comes

and unbound the chains to free your doomed soul

Loring night's evil into morn's bright sun

and perish to phantom dust evermore"

This stanza was almost Byronic. I love the bleakly dark overtones in this piece. It's hard to find good old fashioned poetry indulging in the wine of darkness and vampire tales. Nicely penned. Described the old count perfectly.

[Raj Sahu]

“I do not love men: I love what devours them.” ― André Gide

You work is really horrible. It made my body full of spines. You penned it really well.
Congratulations!

[Fran Marie]

thanks so much Raj, iam so glad you enjoy my horror poem; and thanks for the winning award,, I enjoyed participating in youe contest;

[Chris Smith Welshpoetcs]

Love the way you portray the darkness.

[S. Liberace]

i really like the first line of this poem. it really draws you in and compels you to read the rest of it. no errors that i can see. this is a good poem, quite dark.

[Melissa Kesead]

A very good picture of the troubled soul of the vampire. Lovely.

Thanks for entering the competition.
-Nice write-
-Satan's Toaster

[Rhan F. Sydney]

Very very very good..This is a classically lovely piece. Thank you for this submission

[Becca]

In my mind, I could hear Boris Karloff reading this!
Outstanding!

[Brett Campaigne]

You show how real the bridge between respect and fear is.

[Dizzy-Izzy]

OH MY! I am not a dark person (I don't think) but I just loved this... where did you get that picture? Oh god, not someone you know personally...(see Kristina grimace). My next thought is ..."Why, that looks like someone I'd marry." You'd get that if you knew more about me... anyway Fran, I read this to myself, and then outloud and it is Fab. Thanks so much.... Kristina