Night of The Storm

 

Night of The Storm

 

~Triversen~

The storm was vicious
with heavy rain and hail
hammering the ground.

Lightning zig-zagged
across the night sky
in bright neon flashes.

Dark clouds applauded
with loud claps of thunder
as the storm acted out its rage.

Winds whispered destruction
promising darkness
with it's powerful breath.

Suddenly there was a blackout
but the candles I lit did not
erase dark shadows.

A frightening force
of fear took hold
I couldn't break its grip.

The night of the storm
grew long
stretching into another day.

Author's Note

The Triversen Form

The Triversen (triple verse sentence) is a sentence broken into
three lines. It could be called a verset a surge of language
in one breath.

The Triversen is:
1. accentual. The rhythm of normal speech, employing 1 to 4
strong stresses per line.

2. stanzaic, written in any number of tercets. Each tercet is a
sentence broken into 3 uneven lines.|

3. grammatical. The sentence is broken by line phrasing or
lineating or sense units. There should be 3 units. L1 is
statement of fact or observation, L2 and L3 should set the tone,
imply a condition or associated idea, or carry a metaphor for
the original statement.

4. unrhymed.

Reviews

[Rambling Prose]

It is pieces such as this that make my journey through poetry & prose a delight! I absolutely love these stanzas in particular:

Dark clouds applauded
with loud claps of thunder
as the storm acted out its rage.

Winds whispered destruction
promising darkness
with it's powerful breath.

~beautifully penned - excellent imagery~

[Desert Dreamer]

This is a vision of an angry storm bringing fear and destructions with it's lightning and heavy rain. The fear felt makes me think that death is walking within the storm and must have passed close by. I expected a bad ending in the final verse, and felt relieved (yet disappointed in a way) that there was no description of the destruction caused by the storm, only a threat. I especially like the word choice in the following verse,

"Winds whispered destruction
promising darkness
with it's powerful breath"

Thank you for describing the format you used in this poem. I have learned something today. I like this format very much and may use it sometime in the future. Thank you for sharing.

[DearWorld]

very beautiful xD

[Mark D. Chevalier]

I'm so glad that you outlined the type of poem you wrote. I myself am just an infant in poetry, so to see the different forms and understand them is a real treat.
This work was spooky, with dark undertones and the wrath of Mother Nature. I just adored it!
I can see myself sitting in a darkened room, candles lit as shadows play against the walls as the storm brews outside...
So very very smooth Fran!
Mark

[Spoken]

i really like how you described the storm and brought the darkness out.. so many times I read poems about how enjoyable rain and thunderstorms are.. not to me! They scare the crap outta me!

I love how you personified each aspect of a storm "lightning zig-zagged", "Dark clouds applauded with loud claps of thunder", "winds whispered destruction promising darkness with it's powerful breath"

Chilling and Wonderfully written!

[The Rock And Roll Cowbo..]

WOW Fran I think this is my favorite piece by you... you really made the visions of the storm stand out with superb imagery in your words... going into my favs.

[Phill Oz O'fee]

William Carlos Williams would have been flattered his style was used to such great effect, within the contents of your write. A simple layer of words to convey an enormous magnitude of images.

Wonderful!

God's Blessing

[Bear]

I love this... takes me back to times I've spent in the midst of thunderstorms; here, there, and along my way. The memories of a couple are still strong within my mind due to the sights seen and sounds heard during those storms. Thanks for reminding me of those good memories!!
Sallie Bear

[SM Davis]

FRAN!!! THIS IS ABSOLUTELY REMARKABLE. Your imagery here is so crisp I feel as though I am caught in the midst of the storm.

[Diane]

I loved the whole read Fran and was right there in the storm..but as for the explanation..you lost me..lol..I am getting on in years and my brain is not as active as it used to be...Pen on as I follow all your acheivements with interest..hugs..Diane