`Kiss of Death`

Sonnet on killer storms,twisters,etc..

 

 

The raindrops kissed the Earth and whispered death

Shivers and chills engulfed my haunted soul

an icy phantom stole away my breath

in a vast stillness beyond my control

the winds howled like wolves hunting midnight prey

and thunder roared like a fierce lion beast

Powerless now as the lights went away

frozen in darkness I feared no release 

Oh! that the heavens would calm the storm

and dissolve such darkness of the tomb

vague raindrops turned to hailstones of death's gloom

this weeping nightmare of loss so forlorn

'Alas raindrops remain steady their course

with the kiss of death~having no remorse

Reviews

[Helena]

This sent shivers down my spine. You have spun a great descriptive tale here. Very well done Fran. Threw me headlong into this creepy scenario from the first line.

"Powerless now as the lights went away

frozen in darkness I feared no release....."

Still shivering!!

Hugs Helena

[Sean M. Addams]

The creepiness of this poem is juast to die for everything is perfect in this and orignal.... I really liked this alot .... a most wonderful write... fav lines...The raindrops kissed the Earth and whispered death

Shivers and chills engulfed my haunted soul

an icy phantom stole away my breath............ this paints so a vivid haunted picture

in a vast stillness beyond my control

the winds howled like wolves hunting midnight prey

[Fabian G. Franklin]

A VERY SPOOKY WRITE INDEED, GREAT MOOD SETTING PIECE!

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chilling write with good ryhme

[Sheila Kline]

WOW...just loved this extremely intense write....surely a kiss of death!
You descriptive imagery puts me right smack dab in the middle of this scene of horror!
Great write!

[Ladysue]

wow, you really had a grip of the reader here. The imagery was phenomenal! An excellent piece of writing!

[Anima Inspired]

Wow...this was quite a chilling write! The picture was a brilliant addition, as well, by the way.

I love the use of imagery here...the way that I can almost picture the cold air, the darkness, the storming skies. As for the form and the flow...you nailed it!

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Nice imagery! Your words are very descriptive and powerful. The picture goes well with this piece. I really liked:
"the winds howled like wolves hunting midnight prey

and thunder roared like a fierce lion beast" Your comparisons are fantastic!

[Gabrielle]

This poem is amazing. Thanks for sharing. This topic is something all people worry about in common.

[Chris Willits]

That was great and very descriptive. I love the way it ended also.

'alas raindrops remain steady their course
with the kiss of death~having no remorse'

Just awesome.

[Voltaire Mephisto (aka ..]

This was a nice dark piece. However the switch up on the rhyming for in the second stanza kinda took away from some of the niceness.