Burnt Sienna

 

 

Burnt Sienna

Desperate for rain
A Burnt Sienna Earth
parched by heavy heat
of the sun's harsh rays.
cries out for mercy,

Her scorched hardened
canvas~of reddish~brown
lies in wait,her need of
fresh aqua-~blue hues of
refreshing rain to quench
the burning sizzle of her
baked ground

Raw,rough and red
as caked up indian warpaint
a Burnt Sienna Earth awaits,
anticipates, soon some
soothing smooth raindrops

A new day begins
'Alas, no heavenly colors
of cooler blue~gray skies
to usher in the rain and her
surrounding waters remain
a lake of fire

and still,hot-fiery rays of an
unyielding , over zealous sun.prolong
Earth 's Burnt Sienna days.

Reviews

[Desert Dreamer]

I feel your love of the burnt Earth, and love the subtle rhymes that make your poem flow so well, such as "rays" and "days" in the last verse. The image, although stark, is beautiful...the red earth and the blue sky contrasting nicely in the image you painted in my imagination,
"Raw,rough and red
as caked up indian warpaint
a Burnt Sienna Earth awaits"
I can feel the eagerness for rain...I, too, am watching the skies in hopes of rain to wet the dry earth. Thank you for sharing your poem.

[Deadly Nightshade]

Loved Your poem a lot..

[Lorraine]

Outstanding imagery. You had such detailed portrayal of the earth. The words you used were so nicely weaved, they naturally fit each other. This is an interesting poem.

Keep Writing. ^___^

[Fabian G. Franklin]

"Her scorched harden
canvas" "harden" should be "hardened" here or "hard"... as a passive verb, you have already established past tense and as an adjective it would have to be "hard'.

[Chloe..Across the Unive..]

Fran a wonderful poem.. We feel for the burnt Earth.. love the use of color.. wonderful poem my friend.

Chloe

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Raw,rough and red
as caked up indian warpaint
a Burnt Sienna Earth awaits

this is great ...I like the warpaint metaphor and the way you wrote this nature poem...well..written

[Lady leah]

Very lovely, fantastic write.

[Fire&Ice]

Last stanza was best. Good use of personification, and vivid imagery. Write on.

[Tara Jean Olson]

ohmygosh! this is fantastic!

[PENS FOR PEACE /TJ CALI..]

What an awesome poem! You're truly a great poet! Good luck with all your future works!