^DEadly DeLusioNs^

 

 

Walking down a desolate road at night

when in the distance I did see

a blinding supicious vicious light

approaching ever so near to me

 

I can't explain its eerie glow

nor the chills running up my spine

A death-like stillness pervaded my soul

and a breathless mist held my mind

 

When a strange noise befell my ear

I tried to scream, yet  I could not

Shivering in the cold damp air

my voice in death's vapors caught

 

Light and noise I could not fathom as real

perhaps delusions had taken control

a figment of my imagination,quite surreal

yet so intense, paralyzing my heart and soul

 

Suddenly the vicious light had dimmed

and the deadly noise I heard,faded away

 When flashes of lightning across the sky skimmed

and peals of faint thunder joined in to play

 

My heart beat wildly, released from its marble confine

Splashes of raindrops awakened my haunted soul

reality of the storm had claim me revealing to my mind

only deadly delusions for a moment had taken control

 

Reviews

[Michael X]

i love this poem, you really capture the intent, and the focus remains consistant, which in turn
creates a sense of scenery which comes to life, the rhyme form is equally imppressive,
reminds me of a darkness seeping into the soul, the images are beautifully haunting,
fran, you never cease to amaze me with the scope of depth and your ability to transport
the reader, the shadowy mystique is spooky, the poetic ambience is captivating.

[E. M. Murren]

What a wonderful poem. I was drawn in completely. I had to laugh when you heard the thunder. Really fine work. Brava!!!

[Dead Angel]

ooohhh chilling and eerie, yet very poetic. i wander what was in that light that caused those deadly delusions. this is different from you other writings Fran, but you did a good job at trying something new. very well detailed and it paints a scary but lovely picture. well done! :)

[Dark Daughters]

What a wonderful poem, it just delved deep into the recesses of a disturbed mind (even if you don't have one) great job

[Beautifully Tragic xPoe..]

Wonderful write! Just noticed one or two spelling errors. Nicely done.

[L.G. Knight]

"reality of the storm had claim me revealing to my mind

no deadly delusions had taken control"

I love the poem it cptured my mind when I read a couple lines on my home page and I had to read it absolutely enthralling I spent the whole time wondering what it could passibly be... I am so blonde however because I got lost on the last two lines... the confused me and I was hoping you could provide some clarification... Other than that however this is yet another amzing write and I am sure it will be even more amazing when I findout about the last two lines =)

Wonderful write!

~Frances~