The Ghost

A Fiction Poem

The Ghost            `

                          

See the ghost
he's as real as anyone I know.
He comes at night to stay awhile
then gets up and goes.

He tells me many secrets
About the days in which he lived
about the lady he so dearly loved.
He gave her all he had to give.

He recalled the time
He had asked her to be his bride.
Remembering her saying yes
He was bursting with pride.

But then the fatal day came
When lady ran away
with someone new
He, my friend The Ghost
Didn't know what to do.

He told of his eternal love
he had for her and always will
He had committed suicide
Himself he had to kill!

He said he would wait for her
Someday she too must die
He has a place waiting for her
A palace in the sky.

He said his soul was empty
but love still remained in his heart
For his Dear Lady Love
Nothing but the strings of life
would keep them apart.

He said someday she'll realize
that she belongs with him
and by the strike of her own hand
She too shall win.

Well, The Ghost said he had to go now
'Twas getting rather late,
besides, his Lady Love may be dying now
and he wants to be waiting at the gate.

Well, I sit here bleeding you see,
I just cut my wrists~by now you know
I'm his Lady Love of long ago

The other man left me
so now I must die
and go join eternity,
with my real true love
The Ghost up in the sky.

Reviews

[Damien Thibodeaux]

Hi. I was checking out another contest I got up the courage to enter and saw that you had entered it too with this poem. So I had to read this. It...it... is beautiful! So dark, so sad. It drips with melancholy and heartbreak. I love a poem about the dead that tells a story and has a twist. Excellent write. I can see you published this years ago, so i'm going to spend some time checking out some of your other work over the next few days.

[Fran Marie]

thanks Damien, so very much...so glad you are starting to enter contests...will be visiting your page soon...fm

[Cassie Black]

So simple and really effective, really enjoyed this!

[izzybella]

Wow, amazing. Really beautifully wrote

[Fran Marie]

thanks so much;

[Arrinae]

This is very wonderfully written and I very much enjoy the story it tells. I really loved the twist at the end. Thank you for sharing this with me.

[Aaron M. Anderson]

A tragic poem, full of some potent imagery. Your rhyme scheme is solid, and is very reminiscent of a ballad. Great story and good work overall!

[~Mariposa Una Lila~]

wow great poem, love it....love the picture you added...the poem is totally awsome Fran, thank you sweetie for sedning it, i love it and will be kept as one of my favorites....you rock lil lady! ...you got me at the end ...wow! x0x0x0 brilliant! excellent and toally thrilling! x0x0x

[Sean M. Addams]

i like the concept of this poem very nicely done.... imagery and flow were great in this.... overall impressive job on this one!!!

[With Each Raindrop Come..]

Romance in it, and yet it has something else. Maybe darkness? I can feel the way the ghost felt, and the woman in the same. Its a very good write! I sense a finalist on my hands!