Shards of Glass

Divorce

 

Shards of glass could not cut deeper
nor could the pain be more intense
my dreams shattered and shredded
into tiny pieces of nothingness, now
adrift with the dirty rainwater here
in the gutter

You cherished her more than my love
now your unchained soul is free to roam
my heart beats broken,yet my
pen does the bleeding as I sign these
final papers,your freedom now granted.

so don your new game face
and go on your merry way to the
things which make you feel big and
important and the high-tone life style

 you so desire

just remember that our love was
the real deal~at least when you knew
who you were,but you blew it!

yes, all for a make believe world,

for  an elite crowd
that hasn't the remotest existance
for who you really are.

Reviews

[Natalie C]

Fran Marie, this truly was so heartbreaking and I cannot imagine what something like that must have felt like. This piece is truly exquisite for the simple fact that all the emotions you could have used to described your emotions, you cleverly refrained form sounding hateful and bitter. Sad yes, the sadness I do not wish upon anybody, but in such a applauseable manner.

Wonderful piece, I really loved this!

[flaxx15]

Very good thanks for submitting your poem :)

[Fran Marie]

thank you;

[Poetic Beauty]

The first two stanzas have great images and the description of these are detailed. this is a such a sad poem. Within in a second life can change forever with the simple movement of a pen. i love how you put that in this poem. It subtly lets the reader know what you are talking about. Sometimes we seek things that aren't really important and then in hind sight find out that isn't what we wanted at all. this is all laid out on the paper quite nicely

[UpComesDown]

*CRY* This is so good.... I like it a lot

[bluessadmood]

oh sad words ,so at last you left me ,we were in great love ,but you thought you would follow your dreams ,so big you thought to follow ,so you left me i loved you a lot but you wanted freedom to go find yourself in the big world to be free so i let you go and you left me ,i loved you a lot ,i think i still do i fear for you to may get lost trying to find who you are ,so you left me ,its ok i think i can take it i wish you well but i am afraid,you will not find yourself if and thats what happened ,yes you really left me ,just wonderful ,i loved it all

[Titus McGuire]

Very interesting concept, that he's grown a new face, so to speak, becuase he has parted ways with you. And the irony of it all is how true that is...he has created a whole new life for himself, perhaps in a make believe world, as you have stated, but any way it goes it is not the world he has known or been accustomed to; he must now create a facade, a new face to wear.

Your sorrow shines through in most of this piece, and is reflected in most the words you use, especially the second verse. 'You cherished her more than my love' I find that to be the saddest line, to know that someone put someone or something else above you and what you had with them, that is simply heartbreaking. But I feel that bitterness creeps in on that last verse...'Just remember', how many times that has been said, and that expresses so much, not just sorrow, but dare I say vehemence. Almost a promise, almost a threat...'Just remember'. As if you are saying 'The time will come, and then you will realize what you have lost, but when that time comes it will be too late.'

Very well written, I feel you portray your emotions quite well.

[THE BLACK SEAL]

good job