Another Time and Place

 

 

I knew you in another time and place

   accepting your bold advances 

       determined to saturate myself

            in your love

 

We shared our sweet journey together

   in valley clover and dancing daffodils

       taking all of life's chances

          throwing caution to wayward winds

 

Absorbing each other's spirit forever

   soulmates by the surrounding shadows

      of the night,chasing down the moon

         til the light of dawn,doing what we chose

 

Right or wrong

    no need for rhyme or reason

      for hard fast rules there was no need

            commiting ev'ry sin doing as we pleased

 

'Alas twas another time and place

      things changed ~there is no reverie

             a deep hush falls now,over what once was

                    ever so silently

 

 

 

Reviews

[Sharon Miller Bolander]

Fran, I really love your presentation of this poem! The visual beauty caught my eye before I even started reading your words.

My favorite lines were:
"We shared our sweet journey together
in valley clover and dancing daffodils
taking all of life's chances
throwing caution to wayward winds"

Nice job!
:-) Sharon

[andrew mitchell]

an absorbing write fran. very nice indeed

[Fran Marie]

Thanks, Andrew, so very much,

[alf]

Hi Fran. This is my first reading of your work and I am thrilled by your presentation, your flow of words, the emotional opposites, and the neat way in which you have packaged this together. Just beautiful, alf

[Fran Marie]

Thanks, Alf, so vey much appriciate your review;

[Lyn Anderson]

I have yet to read a piece of yours I do not enjoy. Truly, a marvelous piece.
Now, don't laugh, but I am wondering if you meant to put the apostrophe at 'twas instead of 'alas -- I feel silly when I point these things out in a poem with so many views.

[Fran Marie]

It's ok, you are right, I make so many mistakes. I have to edit so many especially my earlier writes..thanks so much for reading my work..I Appriciated it

[Lyn Anderson]

You are welcome. I don't believe you "make so many mistakes" -- your work is very polished and professional. I don't really understand how so many others let it pass by. As I have pointed out on my page, whether it be fear, embarrassment, or jealousy, none of those things helps us as writers.

[Fran Marie]

Yes, I agree..we all can learn from each other

[Sketchy]

This gave me chills! Absolutely extraordinary!
This is a commendable poem. The formatting fits the mood quite well and the it leaves me breathless.
Words, format, and meaning became a beautiful, singular being at your hands.

[Confuser]

I think it is beautiful. The imagery and it flowed so easily, such a sweet story saying so much. I loved it!

[Fran Marie]

Thank you so much...

[Confuser]

You're welcome.

[Coyote Poetry]

Amazing poetry dear friend.
"Right or wrong
no need for rhyme or reason
for hard fast rules there was no need
commiting ev'ry sin doing as we pleased"
I liked the above lines. Being free and wild for lifetime second are the days we cannot forget. Thank you for sharing the excellent poetry.
Coyote

[Fran Marie]

Thanks John. I so appriciate it,

[Coyote Poetry]

You are welcome Fran.

[Laura Lynn]

This is truly beautiful beyond the shadow of a doubt

[Fran Marie]

Thanks Laura, so very much,

[Matching Socks]

Beautiful poem Fran Marie and very deserving of the top spot honours.
Congratulations. :)

[Fran Marie]

Thanks Ana,so very much,

[honeyleens]

As has been said before, the presentation of your poem was really quite stunning and appealing to the eye. It made my eye start moving across the lines without even meaning to start reading! That being said, I like the almost melancholic, reminiscent, bittersweet tone of this poem - wandering through a journey with two people in love - that is a very beautiful idea. One I think most of us want to find at some point, someone to bring along on an adventure. I liked these lines the most, as they were lovely:

"We shared our sweet journey together
in valley clover and dancing daffodils
taking all of life's chances
throwing caution to wayward winds"

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lovely ...absolutely..your romantic timing and meter..makes this a joy to read