Winds of November

Ae Feislighe Form

Dancing Winds of November
disrobes the trees of Autumn
Leaf limb's,bare bough surrender
succumb to Nature's bottom

Crying Rains,sweep demanding
November's heavy downpours
Fall reigns,its fate, commanding
appearing dead,yet, endures

A Sleeping Moon regresses
undying in cold starkness
November's sky~depresses
rendering life to darkness

Winking Stars spread, diffusing
growing dim,then fade away
denied star light, confusing
'Tis what November displays

A Smiling Sun disappears
to a distant dark expanse
gray sky,sighs,and reappears
as November's winds still dance

Reviews

[Einstein Noodle]

well that's November no doubt ..i use to live in SD and sunny skies are rare in the summer, let alone in the fall..and those winds never stop blowing ..just change direction .. had to read several times to "get into" the rhythm of this rhyming ...i do not understand how the form fits ...with the double and triple rhyming??? so kept looking for that ..once i gave up and just read it i was able to enjoy the painting .. i think the alliterations are spaced nicely and balanced ..Irish poetry is filled with them eh!? Fall is one of my favorite seasons and here in the Ozarks the skies are not so bleak and the threats of winter not nearly so demanding ... the poem rather dark for glorious fall ...a creative and unique approach ... difficult form with syntax always a challenge ...almost precludes sticking to it ;) beautiful imagery as November disrobes the trees ..not sure what her "bottom" is .. i took it as bottoming out ..?
i think your first and last verses are the strong ones in this ..did you have to work and re-work many times? ;)
E.

[Fran Marie]

Thanks E. So much for reading..the triple rhyming are in lines one and three ending words in those lines in each stanza have three syllables..double rhyme ending words for lines two and four.. yes.. (bottom) in tbis poem is as hits bottom ..Octobers fall colors/ leafs turn brown and fall away.so yes this poem is a bit dark.. i added personification .. and yes i had to work this form for a couple of days.. but it all came together

[Einstein Noodle]

ahhhh syllables .. as if getting things down is not hard enough eh!? i was thinking rhyme ..where o where is a double and triple rhyme ;} duh ..i can be pretty dense sometimes ..really appreciate my enlightenment for the day ..

[Fran Marie]

Lol
. Not a problem.. some forms are quite difficult to understsnd.. thanks agsin my friend.😁

[Brianna Brie]

I applaud you for this undertaking. It gets a little tricky and sometimes confusing when following strict rhyme schemes. The rhyme is executed nicely in this poem.

[Fabian G. Franklin]

"Dancing Winds of November
disrobes the trees of Autumn"

I think your verb here should be singular instead of plural. "Winds disrobe" or "Wind disrobes"...either way.

[George Love]

What a great way to celebrate November. Veryt little is ever done outside of Thanksgiving, but you have captured the essence of this month in this brief work. It really does not matter where you are north of the equator, this sums up November, except in those areas tropical..and Alaska...maybe Siberia...oh well it's a great poem about November anyway!!!

[Jeff Brown]

Enchantingly dark. In a good way.

[Linair]

awesome poem.

[JRB]

nicely put, change seen poeticly,
Jan/uisiom

[Silent Kim aka mizmetap..]

I got the feel of autum in your words, very clear and poetic. Good write.

[Wildfleour]

Thank you for explaining this one to me - never saw it before.

Well done, Fran.......

[IndigoPhoenix18]

Fran! This is beautiful!! Absolutely beautiful! Perfect rhythm and rhyme scheme! Oustanding! :D My favorite stanza is:

A Smiling Sun disappears
to a distant dark expanse
gray sky,sighs,and reappears
as November's winds still dance

Incredible!!! :D