Winds of November

Ae Feislighe Form

Dancing Winds of November
disrobes the trees of Autumn
Leaf limb's,bare bough surrender
succumb to Nature's bottom

Crying Rains,sweep demanding
November's heavy downpours
Fall reigns,its fate, commanding
appearing dead,yet, endures

A Sleeping Moon regresses
undying in cold starkness
November's sky~depresses
rendering life to darkness

Winking Stars spread, diffusing
growing dim,then fade away
denied star light, confusing
'Tis what November displays

A Smiling Sun disappears
to a distant dark expanse
gray sky,sighs,and reappears
as November's winds still dance

Reviews

[Einstein Noodle]

well that's November no doubt ..i use to live in SD and sunny skies are rare in the summer, let alone in the fall..and those winds never stop blowing ..just change direction .. had to read several times to "get into" the rhythm of this rhyming ...i do not understand how the form fits ...with the double and triple rhyming??? so kept looking for that ..once i gave up and just read it i was able to enjoy the painting .. i think the alliterations are spaced nicely and balanced ..Irish poetry is filled with them eh!? Fall is one of my favorite seasons and here in the Ozarks the skies are not so bleak and the threats of winter not nearly so demanding ... the poem rather dark for glorious fall ...a creative and unique approach ... difficult form with syntax always a challenge ...almost precludes sticking to it ;) beautiful imagery as November disrobes the trees ..not sure what her "bottom" is .. i took it as bottoming out ..?
i think your first and last verses are the strong ones in this ..did you have to work and re-work many times? ;)
E.

[Fran Marie]

Thanks E. So much for reading..the triple rhyming are in lines one and three ending words in those lines in each stanza have three syllables..double rhyme ending words for lines two and four.. yes.. (bottom) in tbis poem is as hits bottom ..Octobers fall colors/ leafs turn brown and fall away.so yes this poem is a bit dark.. i added personification .. and yes i had to work this form for a couple of days.. but it all came together

[Einstein Noodle]

ahhhh syllables .. as if getting things down is not hard enough eh!? i was thinking rhyme ..where o where is a double and triple rhyme ;} duh ..i can be pretty dense sometimes ..really appreciate my enlightenment for the day ..

[Fran Marie]

Lol
. Not a problem.. some forms are quite difficult to understsnd.. thanks agsin my friend.😁

[Silmara McGarry]

Being November my absolute favourite month first of all, I love the tittle! Then this amazing shower of beautiful words captivated my mind greatly.Excellent poem and the lovely picture makes it perfect!

Well done, Fran :-)))

[An owl on the moon]

There is something so mysterious about autumn, and November's awakening. The darkness falls with a chilled mist and everything begins to fall into a trance. Your poetic sighs speak this over us so well.

[Fran Marie]

Thanka dear Craig for the great review on my poetry. I so appreciate..

[Wondering Mind]

Amazing!

I haven't written rhyme for forever . this gem inspires.

[Fran Marie]

Thanks so vey much..

[barleygirl]

I've lost my appetite for doing structured poems, but I very much admire those who do a great job as you've done! Good autumn imagery & interesting rhymes thru-out. Most of all, I love the dynamic modifiers you use to describe each various aspects of nature (((HUGS))) Fondly, Margie

[Fran Marie]

Thanks Margie so very much appreciated..😀

[emmajoy]

What a wordsnith you are! In spite of the technalities involved.. or maybe because of them, your November "inds are beautifully visual.

(Had to re.read this expert lesson)

[Fran Marie]

Thanks emmajoy.. always appreciate your reviews on my poetry

[emmajoy]

And the same in reverse. Have a happy weekend.

[Matthew Kult]

Great to see a master working her craft. Simply beautiful.

Excellent Read

Matthew

[Fran Marie]

Thanks Matthew.. so much appreciated

[Coyote Poetry]

I loved how you used the language. So alive and beautiful dear Fran.
"Winking Stars spread, diffusing
growing dim,then fade away
denied star light, confusing
'Tis what November displays "
I liked the complete poem. The above lines stood out to me. Thank you for sharing the amazing poetry.
Coyote

[Fran Marie]

Thanks John.. so vey much aapprciate your kind words

[Coyote Poetry]

I love your work and you are welcome.

[MOON]

Great lyrical write, you conveyed the changing season perfectly. I feel it..

[Jibey]

Cleverly constructed and a picturesque depiction of November's bleak disrobing. The Crying, Dancing, Sleeping etc were neatly fed into the scenes, though I must say 'Nature's bottom' was a show-stopper!
You handle words so well.