Winds of November

Winds of November

A Poem by Fran Marie
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Ae Feislighe Form

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Dancing Winds of November
disrobes the trees of Autumn
Leaf limb's,bare bough surrender
succumb to Nature's bottom

Crying Rains,sweep demanding
November's heavy downpours
Fall reigns,its fate, commanding
appearing dead,yet, endures

A Sleeping Moon regresses
undying in cold starkness
November's sky~depresses
rendering life to darkness

Winking Stars spread, diffusing
growing dim,then fade away
denied star light, confusing
'Tis what November displays

A Smiling Sun disappears
to a distant dark expanse
gray sky,sighs,and reappears
as November's winds still dance

© 2009 Fran Marie


Author's Note

  Fran Marie
Ae Freislighe

Each line of the Ae Freislighe has seven syllables, with lines
one and three ending in triple rhymes and two and four with
double rhymes. The poem must also end as it began, either with
the first syllable, word, phrase, or line.


The Ae Freislighe is a quatrain stanza with a fixed rhyme scheme

xxxx(xxa)
xxxxx(xb)
xxxx(xxa)
xxxxx(xb)

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well that's November no doubt ..i use to live in SD and sunny skies are rare in the summer, let alone in the fall..and those winds never stop blowing ..just change direction .. had to read several times to "get into" the rhythm of this rhyming ...i do not understand how the form fits ...with the double and triple rhyming??? so kept looking for that ..once i gave up and just read it i was able to enjoy the painting .. i think the alliterations are spaced nicely and balanced ..Irish poetry is filled with them eh!? Fall is one of my favorite seasons and here in the Ozarks the skies are not so bleak and the threats of winter not nearly so demanding ... the poem rather dark for glorious fall ...a creative and unique approach ... difficult form with syntax always a challenge ...almost precludes sticking to it ;) beautiful imagery as November disrobes the trees ..not sure what her "bottom" is .. i took it as bottoming out ..?
i think your first and last verses are the strong ones in this ..did you have to work and re-work many times? ;)
E.

Posted 6 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

  Fran Marie

6 Years Ago

Thanks E. So much for reading..the triple rhyming are in lines one and three ending words in those .. read more
Einstein Noodle

6 Years Ago

ahhhh syllables .. as if getting things down is not hard enough eh!? i was thinking rhyme ..where o .. read more
  Fran Marie

6 Years Ago

Lol
. Not a problem.. some forms are quite difficult to understsnd.. thanks agsin my friend.�.. read more



Reviews

This one is definitely not a hymn to November. The month is depicted as a bringer of foul weather, the advent of darkness and the weakening of the sun. And all this time I thought of it as beautiful foliage and the end at last of the oppressive climate change heat. I guess it is a matter of perspective. And anyway, I can deal with any season with a strategically placed glass of merlot.

Posted 2 Years Ago


This is magnificent Fran. An outstanding ay of describing that month.

Posted 3 Years Ago


  Fran Marie

3 Years Ago

Thanks Dale..i s o appreciate
your kind words on my poem;
wow. what an excellent characterization of our eleventh month. for me, it will always be the grey month. true to form, so far our's here has been just as you describe. your skilled words dance off the page along with those winds. interesting format has taught me something new too. really terrific. bravo fran ... :)

Posted 3 Years Ago


  Fran Marie

3 Years Ago

Thanks Pete so much, glad you
enjoyed , I appreciate your kind
words and thoughts on .. read more
interesting and beautifully written. Keep it up

Posted 3 Years Ago


  Fran Marie

3 Years Ago

Thanks Arundass TP
s o much appreciated;
Truly beautiful Fran
I love the imagery
And this poem all together makes me feel like i am at the park
Watches leaves fall
Enjoying the perfect Sunday :)

Posted 4 Years Ago


  Fran Marie

4 Years Ago

Thanks Serene S
s o glad you enjoyed
this one.. I appreciate
your words;
dear Fran... now a year later...
I read your poem again. It is even
more predictable that November winds
may be a time of destiny when the tides
are confused and the world is in a tidal
wave of discontent. I am fascinated by
the style... Ae Freislighe. May Autumn be
a blessing to you and yours. fondly, Pat

Posted 5 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

  Fran Marie

5 Years Ago

Autumn greetings; dear Pat..thanks for reading yet again..I so appreciate your kind. reviews always;
dear Fran Marie... it is now the end of December... we feel a loss with undressed trees having lost the leaves of autumn 🍂 glory. The rain has an awesome chill and dreams are filled with hopes of Spring. I appreciate your style of poetry. truly, Pat

Posted 5 Years Ago


  Fran Marie

5 Years Ago

So true my dear friend. . I do enjoy each season with their own unique offerings of ever-changing e.. read more
a sleeping moon and twinkling stars ,says it all,lovely

Posted 5 Years Ago


  Fran Marie

5 Years Ago

Thanks Ron so vey much.
Merry Christmas
 wordman

5 Years Ago

merry christman,you`re welcome
Nicely done, Fran, but then your work always is.

Posted 5 Years Ago


  Fran Marie

5 Years Ago

Thanks Nolo..so very much appreciated..
Fran Marie you are describing a tamed version of today here on the NW coast of England with SW Scotland twenty miles across the bay (Solway Firth)
The winds are not dancing > rushing; biting; cold >> Rain in buckets full each drop

So unlike when I saw the geese fly south awat from the cold to a place for winter sun and warmth >>>> Wish I could fly like a goose

Posted 5 Years Ago


  Fran Marie

5 Years Ago

Your November sounds more blustery indeed..
Thanks so vey much WR for reviewing my poetry
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Wild Rose

5 Years Ago

Seasonal gales hope we dont get them over Christmas
Lost power one year just as everything w.. read more

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Added on February 19, 2008
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