Life's Storm

 

We're just small boats sailing this ocean wide
searching for answers in the tide
Questions of life we dare to ask
from a cosmic universe diversely vast

 

 

Magic moonlight casts a shimmering glow
masquerading a dark sea into a light show
enchanting,yes, lacking enlightenment though
to answers which we may never know.

 

 

Such small boats in a storm tend to drift off course
through crashing waves of a tumultuous sea
Pondering which direction is the right choice
Hoping,stormy tides eventually steer clear a victory.

 

 

And as we wonder,what it's all about
the whys,wheres and whens and who can figure it out.
If the tides yield right answers,will we heed or abort?
Ride the high tide or drown with both feet on the shore

 

 

Tides of the sea perchance good omens foretell
or perplexed we may ride,a perpetual black tide straight into hell!
                         

 

Reviews

[Sarah]

I enjoyed this quite a bit. =) Comparing our journey to life to a journey across the sea, and all the dangers and tests that come with it, is beautiful and you tied the metaphor together well with lines such as "and if the tides yield right answers, will we heed or abort? / Ride the high tide or let ourselves drown , / with both feet on the shore?" Lovely. =) The rhyme scheme tends to switch a bit throughout the poem - the first four lines are AABB and the second four are AABC, which threw off the flow a little - atleast for me (I tend to focus a lot on rhyme. o-o;) But otherwise, great job with this! Very beautiful metaphor. =)

[Jamestown]

Comparison of life and sea is terrific! Wording is fantastic and the imagery is great,
Thanks for sharing and b-blessed!

[Rick Puetter]

Hi Fran,

Another nice one. Love the last line of the first stanza. It certainly is. And the question of where to go, what to believe, etc., especially when we're a small boat adrift on a vast sea and puppets to the wind and tides. Ah, such a seemingly insurmountable problem. Perhaps that's why eastern religions tend to believe in reincarnation and returning again and again before the answers are finally found. Who can do this and get it right in one life time?

Again, greatly enjoyed, Fran.

Best regards,

Rick

[Fran Marie]

Many thanks, dear Rick; so appiciated and glad you enjoyed;

[Rick Puetter]

You are most welcome. This was a completely enjoyable write.

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Life is a sea of opportunity indeed :) Loved how you put all this together...beautiful poetry!

[Willowtree]

Wow I love the imagery in this poem. I have a similar one actually called Like the Ocean. But I like yours much better! It's so well written and the words you use really capture the meaning of the poem. One thing,: the 3rd stanza has a little rhyming mix up. You made the 1st and 2nd lines rhyme and then the 3rd and 4th lines rhyme for the other stanzas and this stanza was different. I think that was the only thing that confused me a bit. But don't get me wrong, I loved the poem:D If I didn't like it , I wouldn't critique it:D