Island

deserted.. i'm here..
alone and
feeling the pain..

wishing to float away
to that better place
falling into your arms..
feeling your heartbeat

hearing the laughter inside your voice
sharing the dream within your heart.

.if only
you would hear my distant call

I'd scale each mountain
I'd cross the sea

just to be with you

Reviews

[Einstein Noodle]

i feel the lonely in this ... perfect title and fine use of the metaphor .. could be longing for one lost or one hoped to find .. the memories stirred in me are of the later ... as want, desire and need went unfulfilled at the time those feelings were at their height ... funny how letting go and knowing lonely and alone are not the same can suddenly materialize that one we have been missing ;) very emotive, well thought out says i ..touches me

[Fran Marie]

Thanks E for your thoughts and
kind words o n my poetry..i ever
so appreciate it;

[sonnie ibadah]

"....if only
you would hear my distant call.."

i really felt this. Thank you.

[Fran Marie]

Thanks sonnie so
vey much appreciate
your words.;

[Robert Trakofler]

You can't write more sincere than you did in these lines... you evoke so much longing and sadness here:( A heart like yours deserves to feel loved dear Fran you have a special soul:) I hope the one that you long for whether here or gone sends you a warm embrace

[Fran Marie]

thanks Robert.
.ever s o much appreciate your thoughts and kind word's;

[Robert Trakofler]

still delicious:)

[Fran Marie]

Hi Rob..thanks
hoping all is well
with you ..stay safe
dear friend;

[emmajoy]

'.. hearing the laughter inside your voice ~ sharing the dream within your heart.'

Sad, so sad but beautiful. Whatever you write, you create a tone, a colour, a note, Fran.. and always the best. Being a mere part of someone is cuts deep, doesn't it. May I send you a hug, please.

[Fran Marie]

yes cuts deep it doth
and thine eyes weep as they must
when love is not touched

thanks Em so much for your kind words on my poetry I s o appreciate..why sure you may send me all the hugs you want I will welcome them with open arms and send some back..;

[emmajoy]

You say so much in such a few words. Sending you yet another hug. (Fran)

[Christoph]

Over the mountains and across the sea, a few towns over, or down the road in a coffee shop, somebody's been thinking about you lately.

[Fran Marie]

the coffee shop thoughts sound good
warm with cream and sugar added..
thanks Christoph for reading and your kind words on my poem..I do appreciate;

[Linda Marie Van Tassell]

I can relate to every word of this poem, feeling like an island that no one visits. They say that love can move mountains; but when love becomes a mountain, nothing moves. I love the painting that you chose to go with your words. Well done.

[Fran Marie]

thank you Linda
s o very much;

[Crowley]

oh the longing. This is both sad and hopeful in the same breath. The visual it creates is melancholy but relaxing and I think we have all been to this island before. Great writing!!

[Fran Marie]

S o we have.yes...been to that island that is..thanks Crowely so much for your kind words..much appreciated

[Patricia Wedel]

dear Fran Marie... someday we will once again hear
the laughter of a person entwined in our heart and soul...
when Stars form bridges to faraway places where
mockingbirds sing and daffodils dance on clouds of
memories embedded in our dreams. truly, Pat

[Fran Marie]

Thanks Patricia..as always your reviews take me o n an ethereal journey all their own..yes to those faraway places..I hear them calling we the poets.. yes? I appreciate your words on my poetry;

[AYVID N]

A poem full of longing as mountains wait to be scaled and distances overcome. Speaks to me of long distance love and very relatable. Such heartfelt words of love and appreciated so much, Fran.

[Fran Marie]

many thanks Divya..I so appreciate you stopping by to read and your kind words;

[R.E. Ray]

Fran, as your poem proves, some of the finest poetry is found in brevity. In a few words, you've created not only a scene but a mood we feel throughout. Stranded alone on deserted island is how we so often feel when we long for another, especially if separated by distance. Sometimes, too, the distance, can be emotional, the space only feet apart in the same house. I truly enjoyed this one, Fran.

[Fran Marie]

Thanks R.E. much of my poetry is short..unless im doing sonnets o r stories...I ever so appreciate your kind words on my poem;