Conquest

Senryu

revel in success
while you may another day
you won the battle

cunning victory
outfox I will~ fill the bill
I have won the war

Reviews

[Einstein Noodle]

ahahahaha ... smart girl! ;) i have been hammered into shape Fran .. easy to accept men's eternal defeat :)))))))))))))))))) hmmmmmmmmmm i may have to retort

women's tongue lashings
mans angst everlastingly .....
the brim, out of reach
:)))))))))))))))))))))))))))))
E.

[Fran Marie]

Haha E..I do like your retort at that..
males have endure such never-ending torture for eons no doubt..we female with our nagging britches pulled too tight.always have something to yell about and we win...well sometimes.ha .thanks dear friend for reading and your words on my poetry..as always I appreciate;

[Einstein Noodle]

ahahaha you have it right the first time dahlink .. you always win! ;)

[Robert Trakofler]

LOL... I have learned to admit preemptive defeat years ago:)

[Fran Marie]

lol..thank s Robert.for the reviews on my poems;

[R.E. Ray]

Ah, an original, poetic rendition of that old truth... Even if one wins the battle, he/she is not declared victorious... for the war continues.

[R.E. Ray]

I read this again because I needed to... sometimes life changes how we interpret poetry. :)

[Fran Marie]

so you have..the war always continues s o true..you can pick up something different by rereading the same poem. 2 months since I wrote this..thanks again I do appreciate it;

[Sean M. Addams]

Love this witty piece. Overall I thought you did a great job on it

[Fran Marie]

H i Sean..nice to see you back at WC thanks for reading and reviewing

[Sean M. Addams]

Anytime my friend

[barleygirl]

Your poem succinctly shows how competitive people view any matching of wit or ability in life. But as your gloating narrator may discover, winning the battle or the war may not always unfold as the raving success that a victor may imagine! Love your thought-provoking snippet of life! (((HUGS))) Fondly, Margie

[Fran Marie]

thanks Margie so much appreciate..sorry i'm. late in replying☺

[Kesch (Finding Julia)]

Love this, touches the core. awesome

[Fran Marie]

thanks so 'v ry much

[R.E. Ray]

Fran, applause on success with Senryu (honestly, I'm clueless about all the poetry rules). I must admit I laughed when I read this one. I can hear a woman saying this to her man. As a man, I know one loss will surely follow a victory, even if delayed. I just expect it! Good one!

[Fran Marie]

Thanks Ray.so vey much.for reading..appreciate;your words on my poem;

[emmajoy]

You're far too good at this form, Fran Mari.. so yet again, i call 'Brava!' Wish I had time and patience to count up how many times I've typed that underneath one of your offerings.. and for how many years. Thank you for the wit and the example of 'how to.. ' :)

[Fran Marie]

awhh. thanks dear Em..seems like forever we've been writing the halls of WC..lol..I so appreciate your words and cherish your friendship

[emmajoy]

Reciprocated 100%. Wishing you a lucky penny and a lasting smile!

[John Alexander McFadyen]

Love these two linked senryu especially with the defiance and sense of triumph injected into the final one!

[Fran Marie]

Thanks John..glad you enjoyed this one..I
ever so appreciate your words;

[jacob erin-cilberto]

oh this is so good...two separate senryu that can stand on their own, and yet combined work nicely as cause and effect...
one battle at a time.
j.

[Fran Marie]

Thanks Jacob so much for reading glad you liked these two..I so appreciate your words;