Night Shadows

 

Past midnight,and I could not sleep
Outside,wind howled,yon willows weep
Dark shadows danced upon the lawn
Night shadows deep,Night shadows deep

My heartbeat caught in sleepy yawn
My mind,while wished the shadows gone
My body shivered, hands did shake
Oh what was wrong? Oh what was wrong?

Would that I could some pills to take
To calm my nerves, a relief break
Was imagination at play?
My mind did make, My mind did make?

Walking amongst the shadows stayed
but soon sunrise greets a new day
Then dawn appeared,'Twas oh so sweet
Shadows at bay,They went away. 

Reviews

[Constance]

The shadows fortunately do have a way of disappearing, when we least expect them to. :) Nicely done. I like the couple of parts where you did repetition, as it added meaning and both had purpose. There are a couple of places where the flow seems disrupted, but the poem is so beautiful and heartfelt that those don't seem to matter much. Lovely work. :)

[LostInSight]

Wow that was intense and really beautiful. You have composed yourself a very fine piece of verse and I loved reading it, amazing! :)

[Fran Marie]

Thanks so much, I appreciate it a lot..

[LostInSight]

my pleasure dear, would you love reading mine?

[seal]

I enjoyed reading this. :) I especially liked the line "Outside,wind howled,yon willows weep". Great Job!

[The Mad Prophet]

Wow, another very well done poem. Very subtly dark, that is what I like the best about it. Great job, nicely expressed. That last lines are really neat as well, goes with the poem.