`Vague Visions`~Keatsian Ode

Vague Visions~


Vague visions of you in deep grey twilight
snared my soul, when death swiftly claimed you there
'true colors hide the rain;' stealing warm nights
'most sweet it is' naught,tis stagnant stale air
Oh, sleep! sleep on, beneath a shadowed tomb
yet, let your spirit's love remain with me
vacant now, my heart bleeds and eyes doth weep
Oh, deep down, thy death has caused mortal wound
no rosy 'morrows shall I ever see
and red sunsets no longer mine to seek

Nor can I ever embrace silver moons
whence, we kissed and stars shone and danced above
gone, the magic of our love song's sweet tunes
blissful moments we shared entwined in love
The sea of life~'tis a motionless wave
mountain's purple majesty, lost its hue
azure no longer paints vivid skies
My life itself; like a lonely lost grave
unbearable, my darling, without you
everlasting teardrops line these sad eyes

And winter winds shall turn summer's breeze cold
'alas,'tis but a bitter breath of dust
breathing sorrow's wreath of pain still quite bold
in solitude, misery, live, I must
It matters naught 'ere moon rises or sets
nothing can fill this empty void I feel
green valleys nor hillsides can comfort me
Each dark step I take will have blind effects
nor have interest thru~cold eyes of steel
whence, stars sparkled, these same eyes saw with ease

Author's Note

The Keatsian (or English Ode) is constructed using lines of
iambic pentameter. As a general rule, there are three verses, but
even Keats himself used more than that in some of his odes. The
rhyme scheme is:

ababcdecde fgfghijhij klklmnomno - ten lines per verse.

Subsequent verses follow the same pattern, and the verses should
not be interconnected with rhyme at all.

As a refresher, an "Ode" is typically a lyric poem of heightened
or intense emotion, usually intended to be sung.

Reviews

[Kara Emily Krantz]

lovely lovely LOVELY piece! I love your words choices, and i love how classy your words are, and your piece altogether. It's classy and classic, and really well done.

"Nor can I ever embrace silver moons
whence, we kissed and stars shone and danced above "

loved that :)

'unbearable, my darling, without you "

for some reason, that line was perfect. :) made me sigh.

wonderful job, m'dear!

[Kara Hadley]

um...great! yeah.
the wording you used here perfectly described the feelings and emotions here.
really a beautiful piece.

[Travis Lawrence]

Your style reminds me of Walt Whitman.