Windblown Rose

Pushkin Sonnet

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Oh Red Rose,blow your petals to the wind windblown rose so fragile,yet boldly strong In my direction, let romance begin Velvet petals flowing in with love's song. Winter's dark gray tones, make need of your face A lovely Red Rose of delicate grace On emerald stem, your green pedestal you flourish with life, love's radiant glow. Roses bring sunshine and chase blues away I'll await your sweet scent,with each new breath Tho~snow falls now,I sense your presence fresh Softly glide to me, make my heart beat gay. Awaken my spirit, lying deep within Oh Red Rose, throw your petals to the wind.

 

Reviews

[Kenji Light]

I like this. Sonnets usually aren't my thing but you pulled it off well. I like your concluding line and the way that it ties in with the title. Your use of language also serves its purpose well and adds an older and more Shakespearian air to the work. The last couplet is wonderful in the way that it ties everything up in a neat bow, bringing us full circle back to your introduction. I believe in the power of nature to lift our spirits. Plants are resilient when they need to be, especially roses, which are actually a great deal more sturdy than one would anticipate. Roses have lasted the longest in one piece long after they have died, than any other flowers that I have kept. Roses hold on to life, or at the very least, retain enough moisture, to outlast their peers. I loved the way you spoke of roses because even though they are common, they are the symbols of romance and of course, are quite beautiful regardless. If it weren't for roses, The Divine Comedy wouldn't be hardly as good, or, for younger reviewers, The Beauty and the Beast wouldn't have been nearly as spectacular or visual stimulating. Great write! I really enjoyed this. I love the use of old styles because it adds something original. I mean, I am fond of the newer works, but there is still a special place in my heart for the classical styles of old and this piece fits nicely with them. As I read through it I was reminded of my British Literature course in high school as well as my Western Literature course in college. To be able to evoke memories from me is a difficult task and yet the classics have an ability to do this to me quite often. I was taken aback at getting to remember those fond days. Thanks for helping me recall them and good job crafting this piece! -Kenji Light

[Cybr]

I'm also somewhat mild about sonnets, but I think you did a very good job with this poem. The particular point that I really enjoyed with your poem is how you hint (at least to me) that the rose is bringing spring and is the creator of all the emotions you reference rather than spring bringing the rose and the poet just feeling the emotions. I love that kind of playing with reality in a poem.

[poet2angels (lynda)]

I am a lover of Sonnets and this one is gorgeous...
I also adore roses:) so you captured my heart with every breathtaking line.
Truly beautiful as a rose...I love this
Thank you for entering my contest!

Lynda

[The Archangel Gabriel]

Thank you for your bold submission to my contest. This is a really nice sonnet. I have not "nit-picked" meter and syllable counts, YET! Muhahahahhahahaha! I note that "not following meter and syllable counts" is a very good artistic statement at times.

I don't care if that is a traditional rhyme scheme, and I am trying to look it up. I had to do an aa-bb-cc-dd-ee-ff-gg at one point because I liked it that way.

Dostani said it well - "I found your write exceptional and the use of the rose excellent imagery."

Luna also said - "This is such a sweet song like piece. I could so easily heard this put to music."

Fortunately, there are only two submissions to the contest at this time, and it still might take days to attempt to "properly judge."

Anybody further analyzing this might consult:

http://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/Sonnet

I am not sure how this contest will be judged. It might have an Olympic Diving score with "difficulty" and "execution" components probably multiplied to derive a "score." That is kind of interesting, but it is kind of short-changing a "emotional and artistic impact grading system."

I will have to come back to this later for a more intensive study.

-Gabe

[Cold Coffee Magazine]

The end brought me back to the begining. I liked that alot. The whole piece was very vivid.

Very nice

Dave

[Roy]

Lovely. Very romantic and beautiful..and now I have an image of a beautiful wind blown red rose to take with me in my day. Thank you.

[PoemRodent]

I found your write exceptional and the use of the rose excellent imagery.

Dostani

[The Rock And Roll Cowbo..]

Flows so beautifully and gracefully, another great poem from you!!

[Raef C. Boylan]

I think a sonnet usually follows the format of abab cdcd efef gg, whereas yours goes abab ccdd effe gg - unless this is a non-english sonnet? (sorry, I like learning about new styles)
However, it's nicely written. I think if you decreaed the number of times you say rose, such as finding alternative ways/images to express the concept of rose, that could be really effective, as the magic of the word is lessened a little by repetition.
Nice write.

[Rain]

I learned an ugly little lesson about myself last night, that I didn't like. You always review my work, and I sat her thinking.."I know she's a good writer, and if I read it, I'll like it, then, if I'm a man, I'll have to rate what it deserves, which will move me from second. Well, I read it, and as I expected, it was a beautiful well written piece. I have learned my lesson. We are all writers, and this piece is better than good. Rain..

[Crazy Cat Man]

great sonnet