Line

Senryu

 

I'm an unused line

caught between your choice of words

erased from your mind

Reviews

[Robert Luna]

This a powerful piece as it caused me to stop and think about things around me and the world as whole. The pure conveying of some thing more than what is merely stated as we see lines as the meaning of everything and nothing. We can see the depth of a souls perspective being unraveled before our very eyes and what truth have we learned to knowing something of the everything that comes together to make each of us whole and as individual parts of a larger picture of the world.


Great Job!!!!!!

[Poetic Beauty]

Lines are crossed many times even if it is mentally with words.

[JayceeC]

As I read your words they linger, rocking my tounge as if daring to be read aloud to grasp a deeper more metaphoric meaning than the obvious. The haiku form lens itself to the reader adding his own words to fill in a personal meaning.
Congrats on the win!

[Fran Marie]

Thanks for reading and the
kind review Jaycee..i so appreciate;

[emptyinkwell]

A fun poem about writing! I admire your creativity. Great syntax!

[angelina neves]

uau! fantastic!
beautiful powerful image!
I wish it was write by me!
Congratulations

[Fran Marie]

Awhh.. thanks.. so vey much appricite it

[Lyn Anderson]

This is by far one of my favourite senryus I have ever read.

[Archia]

I love the whole metaphor behind this and how it actually can be relatable. Just the idea of being like a line, it's so thoughtful.

[Wendy Seames Garner]

Oh, I like this Fran!

[Aria]

i hate when that happens! LOL. you say a lot with very litte, as are haikus. good work. i think every poet and writer will relate to this

[dutch2lips]

oh well written, brilliant!

[quinfinn]

beautiful representation of one obliging distance from another. i like it.