Illusions

Dark Poetry

 Hazy moonlight stretched across the night sky
as I gazed from my window at a starless night
I percieved visions~ myself a stone illusion
and gloom fell heavy 'pon my heart and soul
an illumation in grayish blue tone of rigor light
like none of which I've seen before
yet facination overwhelmed me
as zig-zagged shadows danced in confusion
across my darken bedroom floor
'Oh, what fate would befall me, no clue had I
Nor could I fathom what evil shadows had taken control
On this eve of dark December,strange illusions danced free
 at the stroke of midnight plus one hour more
 

 

Reviews

[None]

You really captured the night in this prized poem of yours. All the words come together to make a unique performance. Your words: "facination overwhelmed me as zig-zagged shadows danced in confusion across my darken bedroom floor" really grabbed me!

[Cold Coffee Magazine]

I love your darker pieces.

Great one here.

Dave

[*~Imperfectly Me~*]

Great job! It's such a great peice... I felt as if I were watching it myself... great job!

[J. M. Yeary]

Very nice Fran, has an eerie Shakespearean feel to it. Definitely one to hold on to...very nice work :-)

[zach martin]

i like your descriptiveness in this one

[TL Boehm]

a chilling poem - cold beyond the mercury....to the soul. Well done

[Roy]

Magnificent dark poem with a superbly painted background and setting. Entrancing, alluring. Very nice work.

[Midnitefyrfly]

wow. your use of evocative images is quite exceptional. I could really feel and see so much more than words.

[Diana Owen Busy with Li..]

This had excellent imagery. it matched with the picture wonderfully. It was a bit chilling. But I like that. great work/

[SM Davis]

Fran Marie, the picture is perfect for this. Once again you have given us another painful write that is so beautiful it is almost sardonic. I loved this one!

[Kenji Light]

I love works like this that are laden with imagery. I love imagery and the ability to form mental images as the narrative is played out in my mind. You do this well with a perfect blend of painting words and storytelling words. I think that the picture of the statue that you included is an excellent supliment to the piece and cannot be overlooked either. I really enjoyed reading this piece and can see why it was on the list of top-rated literature.