BLooD MooN

Dark Poetry

 

 

 

A pale bluish moon shown dimly that night,

 

an eerie moon with dark shadow's light

 

as you drew life's last breath,'twas a damned moon

 

as I stabbed you to death, a blood moon at best

 

I could not let you go to a new lover's arms

 

and be left with the curse of loving you

 

after seducing me with your deadly charms

 

you left me crying in the rain, sad and blue

 

I had to kill you both, I had no choice

 

was then I knew blood would be on the moon that night

 

for I follow the blood moon's voice

 

and killing  you was my delight

 

Some may think me quite mad, a crazy loon

 

but I would do it all over again

 

to murder while the blood is on the moon

 

a dark blood moon that guides my hand.

 

 

 

 

 

Reviews

[MandarinOranges]

WOW!! you really can write a fine piece of poetry, you know that?! i really like this piece. a bite dark, but that, i think, is what makes it so much more appealing to me. you are a master at combining words so they flow from the readers mouth like a stream in summer, swift and smooth. also, great imagery-both in your words and with the picture selection for the piece.

I luv your work!! Thank you for sharing with us!

[Imperfection]

The twist in the last line was perfect.

This is an amazing write.

Thanks for entering it into my contest.

[Ice Queen of the Vampir..]

Ooh, I really like this and the picture is just perfect. Great write!!!

Heather

[Cold Coffee Magazine]

Mamma alays sai, "It' not what yuo say it's how you say it. and ths one says it all without wasting spc or letters.

[NJ Schneider]

It was very short. Not the greatest I've ever read but you have potential. Keep workin at it!

[Queen P...]

DELICIOUS.. I could almost inhale the "metallic" scenery..

[T.I.M.S.]

Short sweet and to the point.
As always great job one this poem.

[Leah Maldonado]

i think the idea of the poem is really great. maybe after the contest you can add more lines to it describing the sence, and stuff like that.
but over all i thought this was a cool poem.
nice work!
Leah

[TL Boehm]

wow a different style for you. A bit of poetry noire here. I like it though and the graphic adds to the presentation. Well done.

[Lydia Shutter]

OH MY....the brutality of the last line was a shock to me because the first four lines were so beautifully picturesque! Great job, Fran. I really like the graphics you have been using lately. Lydia

[Elise O'Haire]

I really like this, Fran. It's very eerie and mysterious. Good job!

Elise