BLooD MooN

Dark Poetry

 

 

 

A pale bluish moon shown dimly that night,

 

an eerie moon with dark shadow's light

 

as you drew life's last breath,'twas a damned moon

 

as I stabbed you to death, a blood moon at best

 

I could not let you go to a new lover's arms

 

and be left with the curse of loving you

 

after seducing me with your deadly charms

 

you left me crying in the rain, sad and blue

 

I had to kill you both, I had no choice

 

was then I knew blood would be on the moon that night

 

for I follow the blood moon's voice

 

and killing  you was my delight

 

Some may think me quite mad, a crazy loon

 

but I would do it all over again

 

to murder while the blood is on the moon

 

a dark blood moon that guides my hand.

 

 

 

 

 

Reviews

[MandarinOranges]

WOW!! you really can write a fine piece of poetry, you know that?! i really like this piece. a bite dark, but that, i think, is what makes it so much more appealing to me. you are a master at combining words so they flow from the readers mouth like a stream in summer, swift and smooth. also, great imagery-both in your words and with the picture selection for the piece.

I luv your work!! Thank you for sharing with us!

[funeralmoon]

hahaha.. this was eerie and very fun. great way of showing how you solved your problems with violence.. great job

[Scott Free]

Not bad! I rather liked it.
The beginning failed to catch my attention...it gave me the impression that it was telling a story--not really like a poem this length should.
Maybe start with something else, then flow into the first line? Other than that it was good.

~S

[Sean M. Addams]

The darkness was bloody good in this piece... dripping with great detail and imagery... very nice job ... thanks for entering this in my contest... a very fun piece in a creepy kind of way...

[Adelia Alighieri]

Whoa...
Now that's something!! =D
Great!

[Bryan A.]

Okay, I know I've said this before, but your writing is absolutely amazing. This is definitely dark and creepy, in a good way of course. The only thing is, I wish it was longer. It leaves me wanting more, it's like... forgive my reference here, but your writing is like my own personal internet crack. I really enjoyed this, seriously.

[xlynne]

really nice! i think it good be a little longer, but nevertheless dark

[Spat Queen]

Thanks for the nightmares!!

[Suelou]

Wonderful write, Fran!

[James K. Blaylock]

Just awesome, Fran! Congrats, on the win, my friend.

jkb