and we danced~

..contest write. For Blue Rose cafe challenge

and i danced..  as if in a hazy dream

    

                                    like a ballerina

amid lilac's heavenly scent, on a sunlit day

                

                                  and there you lie

in a pitch-black room, sad drowning in misery

 

                    and i danced over to your side

come love i whisper gently, take my hand

                                 and there i stood

waiting determined to break your mood

          and the smell of lilacs grew stronger

with an unpleasant odor

                                   and there you died

as i held your hand in mine

        and then in the black room shone a brilliant light

                                     

  and we danced~

                               

                                  

Author's Note

Just a dream that seemed so real

Reviews

[Robert Trakofler]

I love those sort of dreams have precious few that I remember but usually when i do they are so poignant. I love the Lilac reference I have so many things attached to the smell of lilacs. beginning to think its a poet thing:) that picture and message makes me want to jump into that painting and take that hand

[Fran Marie]

Hi Robert..thanks for stopping by to review
yes..lilacs may be a poet thing..I notice they are
written about in much poetry..much appreciate your words;

[Silmara McGarry]

Beautifully well putted. I felt write into it...(come love i whisper gently, take my hand) Superb, thank you!

[Fran Marie]

Thank you for commenting on my poem..sorry i'm late with my thank you note.. i do appreciate it..

[Silmara McGarry]

No worries... And you are most welcome, Fran! ;-)

[Onyia-Ali, Kingsley Chu..]

A very good poem that can not be predicted easily. I somuch appreciated the last four line. Well done.

[Fran Marie]

Thank so much.. a little late but i so appreciate.it

[barleygirl]

Very interesting & surprising storyline here! I couldn't imagine what was coming, each step of the way. And when I got to the end, it all makes perfect sense. Awesome imagery, gracefully representing the sensations of dancing.

[Fran Marie]

thanks so much..I so appriciate your reviews..

[Uche Paul]

A real dream... A dream that's real... Nice one... Nice work... Nice Poet!!!

[Lluvs]

Beautifully written it seemed to describe what "hope" means to me (:

[Bohrium Guy]

I see you still haven't lost your flare after all these years of reading your stuff....

PS...Cupid with an arrow.... you can figure out who I am... :)

[Fran Marie]

Lol..yep.. still writing ..let me guess ..your name starts with a D..add an OST and if any are left it' these three ANI

[Bohrium Guy]

;) minus spoken

[Philip Muls]

Determined to break your mood. Powerful wording. Intriguing use of the lilacs symbol in relation to death.

Well done.

[Fran Marie]

Thanks Philip;
so vey much appreciated;

[Coyote Poetry]

A beautiful tale with a positive ending. The story reminded me of dear Grandparent. They loved to dance. I can see them dancing in heaven today. Thank you Fran for sharing the outstanding poetry.
Coyote

[Fran Marie]

Many thanks, John; I so appreciate it..

[Coyote Poetry]

You are welcome Fran.

[SleeplessVolcano]

Aahhh....determined to break your mood.......such an apt description of those who are not flummoxed by our grumpiness and remain able to spread their light and love until we "turn".

Beautiful writing!

[Fran Marie]

Thanks so much for reading and for the review..much appriciated..