and we danced~

..contest write. For Blue Rose cafe challenge

and i danced..  as if in a hazy dream

    

                                    like a ballerina

amid lilac's heavenly scent, on a sunlit day

                

                                  and there you lie

in a pitch-black room, sad drowning in misery

 

                    and i danced over to your side

come love i whisper gently, take my hand

                                 and there i stood

waiting determined to break your mood

          and the smell of lilacs grew stronger

with an unpleasant odor

                                   and there you died

as i held your hand in mine

        and then in the black room shone a brilliant light

                                     

  and we danced~

                               

                                  

Author's Note

Just a dream that seemed so real

Reviews

[Robert Trakofler]

I love those sort of dreams have precious few that I remember but usually when i do they are so poignant. I love the Lilac reference I have so many things attached to the smell of lilacs. beginning to think its a poet thing:) that picture and message makes me want to jump into that painting and take that hand

[Fran Marie]

Hi Robert..thanks for stopping by to review
yes..lilacs may be a poet thing..I notice they are
written about in much poetry..much appreciate your words;

[light and ashes]

Wow, this so good! Amazing job!

[Fran Marie]

Thans Light so
very much; I
appreciate

[Poetic Beauty]

It seems as if she is waiting to guide him into heaven or whatever afterlife you believe in. Beautiful

[Fran Marie]

Thanks Kristina
so very much
appreciate your
review;

[wordman]

loved it fran,i liked it all

[Fran Marie]

thanks Ron
I so appreciate
glad you enjoyed;

[wordman]

you`re welcome

[Chris Shaw]

I loved the movement and the heady fragrance of lilac I was gifted as I read your lines. Dancing and trying to enhance another's low mood, but such a heart breaking end to this dream. I liked that the black room was filled with light as he died. Quite spiritual and dreamy this write Fran Marie I also enjoyed your posted image.

Chris

[Fran Marie]

Hi Chris..thanks ever so much for reading and for your kind words on my poem..much appreciated;

[DAH]

There's something beautifully Leonard Cohen-esque about this piece
that is fantastic. Lovely language, lovely imagery, dreamy and warm,
even in death ...

Bravo, Poet!
DAH

[Fran Marie]

Thanks Dah so very much appreciate your kind words on my poem.
Thanks for the friend request ..nice to meet you ;I will visit soon..

[DAH]

My pleasure and thank you !

[amber martin]

this is so beautiful💚😍 I love the beautiful painting too! all coordinates well.

[Fran Marie]

Thanks Amber for your review and thanks for the friend request..nice to meet you..I will. Visit soon..

[Pete]

so sensory and emotional. feels like a dream. deeply touching and oh, that mention of lilac is powerful ... :)

[Fran Marie]

Thanks Pete..ever so much for reading..I appreciate your words on my poetry;

[Onlyme]

Beautifully creative and a very perceive poem. That is touching and very sad.

[Fran Marie]

Thanks Dawn..so very much appreciate ..

[Kay Salisu Titilola]

This would be a beautiful reality if the dream was actually real.
It's really amazing sharing it.
I enjoyed the reading.

Well written, Fran.

[Fran Marie]

Thaanks Kay so very much..I so appreciate your kind words on my poetry;

[Kay Salisu Titilola]

My pleasure.