love~a four letter word

 

sometimes love bites
           and love's bite is bitter
tears from eyes one cries
             and the sadden heart
                                 does wither

 

          she told him it was just a fling
He thought that surely she did jest
                       he gave her everything
                                 and did

                                      his very best

  
but she never promised anything
                  not love, nor caring so
 nor did she ask for stars or moon
                               but oh

                                   he loved her so

 

        he was a broken man
wearing his heart on his sleeve
        she told him to return no more
                       and not so politely

                                      to Just Leave!

Reviews

[Neville]

What a treasure you have penned here.. not of course for the poor bloke subject to such a rejection, but for independence and the women's liberation movement in general..... No one want to be rejected tho do they, except for Alice Cooper (lol)..... All Good Things... Neville

[Fran Marie]

Thanks Neville for reviewing always enjoyed you
Kind and lighthearted. Words..yep lol @ Alice Cooper..

[Neville]

My very sincere pleasure my Friend and true..... Neville

[Kathy Van Kurin]

"Love-a four letter word"
Fran Marie,
This was a poem with a lesson. Stars in the eyes'
are how a person may view another when hunger
for loneliness to be filled with another. The time
and effort to build a relationship is lost many a
time when the danger signals may of bee present.
What a great poem:
"She told him it was just a fling He thought that surly
she did jest he gave her everything and his very best"
What can be done? I suppose sometimes things are just
so difficult. Good poem and message. Oh and I found the
lay out such a winsome way to present.
Blessings,
Kathy

[Fran Marie]

Thanks Kathy..I so appreciate the kind comments on my poetry

[Kathy Van Kurin]

Your welcome, my pleasure for sure. I learn so much about writing and of course just the enjoyment is a plus. Have a good rest of the week
Kathy

[Inject Positivity]

Beautifully portrayed, amazing concept....The rhyming was brilliant.....Thank you for sharing such an amazing poetry....Full ratings!!!

[Rose Olstrom]

This poem is almost perfect, you just need to add comma's and punctuation at the end of Rhythmic lines

[Fran Marie]

Thanks, Rose so vey much...

[Laura S-C]

Incredibly well written. It flows and the message is clear.

[Fran Marie]

Thanks, Laura, so much...

[Valentine]

Sounds like she did not have even kindness to offer. He may be better off without her. Valentine

[ANM]

Has a lightness that belies the deepness of the subject... Very well written Fran!

[An owl on the moon]

Such bittersweet rhythm and rhyme, all that is love and life torn away suddenly. Nothing can empower us like love, and nothing can crush us like the moment love is taken away.

[Fran Marie]

Thanks, Craig so vey much, good to see you also at WC..so many have left..hope all is wel with you these days..

[An owl on the moon]

I am learning to find light in my darkness. Thank you so much, Fran. :)

[Tomás Ó C..]

At least he got the fling... I know the feeling! :-/

[emmajoy]

Though sad in its way.. what a sting in the tail of this - or should is it a tale wrapped in carefully laid words? And, they are careful. You've said how it is, how Woman can be as much an executioner as a man. Seems the modern way, what women have fought for for years. Had Pankhurst known though, I wonder if..

Love the power of your words, the way you come/go start to finish with great panache!

[Fran Marie]

Thanks, Emmajoy, so much,,glad you enjoyed...