On Scarlet Wings

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On Scarlet Wings^

  

In the twilight of life's last tired breath
whereupon our soul prepares for the flight
it's fire and wings that fly us home,yes
a Phoenix rises renewed toward new light
On Scarlet Wings,our spirit soars on high
leaving ashes of mortal death behind
giving up the ghost, when life's course runs dry
'Alas, beauty of peace our soul doth find
No more to suffer Earth's prolonged decree
of life's daily struggles from dawn to dusk
grinding the distance to the ninth degree
a constant state of flux,as live we must

It's a fire and wings that fly us home
On Scarlet Wings,once life's seeds have been sown

 

Reviews

[Mason]

This is a very powerful poem. It has a unique take on the phoenix in symbolism of life and death that I really enjoy. My personal favorite lines, especially when compared, were "No more to suffer Earth's prolonged decree" and "It's a fire and wings that fly us home" that suggest something different than what a phoenix is usually for, which is not just death but most importantly resurrection. Most would interpret the use of a phoenix as returning to life, but you seem to imply that rebirth isn't in mortal life, but in some version of the afterlife that you call "home." That has a bit of a Christianity vibe to it, though I do not know your personal beliefs. Anyway, I really enjoyed it. Thanks for submitting.

[Fran Marie]

Thanks so very much;

[Different Wings]

Just wanted you to know how much I love the profile picture. I've used it a bunch of times before for various things, and I'm glad to see someone else doing so!

[Nancy Lee Shrader]

Congrats to you on this amazing poem.

[Elizabeth]

"Alas, beauty of peace our soul doth find
No more to suffer Earth's prolonged decree
of life's daily struggles from dawn to dusk"

Breathtaking imagery. Loved this.

[Butterflymom]

This is absolutely beautiful!

[Jessi Webb =)]

Simply amazing ! I loved it . It is just... magnifisent . It is very discriptive and amazing !!!

[a]

I love this poem! The scarlet magic persists here, a butterfly, a phoenix, a bird of fire lives here!
thank you!

[Frances O'Neill]

Nice Poem!

[Sound]

Great poem. I liked the energy. My only observation would be the last line of the first stanza. I think maybe this would sound better:

a constant state of flux, and live we must

Just my opinion of course.

[Nancy Lee Shrader]

A beautiful descriptiong of our final destination. Flying home to eternal life.

Thanks for entering my contest. Great Poem.

[Nancy Lee Shrader]

that was BEAUTIFUL! I LOVED IT! Sure wish I had written that one.