On Scarlet Wings

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On Scarlet Wings^

  

In the twilight of life's last tired breath
whereupon our soul prepares for the flight
it's fire and wings that fly us home,yes
a Phoenix rises renewed toward new light
On Scarlet Wings,our spirit soars on high
leaving ashes of mortal death behind
giving up the ghost, when life's course runs dry
'Alas, beauty of peace our soul doth find
No more to suffer Earth's prolonged decree
of life's daily struggles from dawn to dusk
grinding the distance to the ninth degree
a constant state of flux,as live we must

It's a fire and wings that fly us home
On Scarlet Wings,once life's seeds have been sown

 

Reviews

[Mason]

This is a very powerful poem. It has a unique take on the phoenix in symbolism of life and death that I really enjoy. My personal favorite lines, especially when compared, were "No more to suffer Earth's prolonged decree" and "It's a fire and wings that fly us home" that suggest something different than what a phoenix is usually for, which is not just death but most importantly resurrection. Most would interpret the use of a phoenix as returning to life, but you seem to imply that rebirth isn't in mortal life, but in some version of the afterlife that you call "home." That has a bit of a Christianity vibe to it, though I do not know your personal beliefs. Anyway, I really enjoyed it. Thanks for submitting.

[Fran Marie]

Thanks so very much;

[Patricia Wedel]

dear Fran... On Scarlet Wings... we rise above to higher spheres
perhaps with tears to cleanse our soul. Yes, we have sown our seeds
and gathered weeds to show the beauty of our deeds. We danced among
flowers and sang with the birds... now we venture into the great beyond.
A beautiful poem that we can treasure. truly, Pat

[Fran Marie]

Thanks Pat ..yes indeed we have sown seeds and then some..and the great beyond seems closer each day..I appreciate your lovely poetic reviews dear friend..your words are comforting as always..

[Patricia Wedel]

You are welcome dear friend. as ever, Pat

[Nolo Segundo]

Congrats on your win, Fran Marie, for a very beautiful and 'soulful' poem, one that reads almost like a hymn.

[Fran Marie]

Thanks Nolo, so vey much appreciate..

[Julie McCarthy (juliesp..]

i especially loved the last sentance
beautiful poem thanks so much
for entry into my competition.
well done!

[Fran Marie]

Thanks Julie.so much foe reviewing my poem..I so appreciate and enjoy participating in your contest..

[MAD ENGLISHMAN]

I like this poem. It's touching and a great interpretation of death.
Well done.

[MAD ENGLISHMAN]

Thanks for entering this in my little competition. It wouldn't be fair to comment now but I will after the contest has ended.
regards. Clive

[yash]

Genius work, i really liked the style of writing, i wish i could had a touch of it.

[Fran Marie]

Thanks so vey much;

[Shalini Dinesh]

A very beautiful poem, i just absolutely love it....

[Zahra]

beatiful poem. Thanks for sharing