His words

Blank~Verse~Sonnet

 

 

'It's a cruel and cold world',those were his words
declaring, in whispered voice,'heartless
void of compassion,' he continued on....
dark shadows and black auras ; his halo
seeming so helpless, drowning in despair
hopelessly sinking into dark abyss
his lost lonely soul,slunk away in doom
sliding lament into a recorder
 
then, taking the gun to his temple,he....
Oh! No! I cried,that's when it all went blank
I could not bring myself to watch the end
turned the video off and poured myself
a stiff drink,God, I needed one so bad!
His words replay,in my head,ev'ryday....
 

Reviews

[Lydia Shutter]

Wow, this is intense, Fran....At first I thought you were watching a lover or a friend committing suicide...then I realized it was just a movie you were watching....or was it? It IS a cruel cold world, but sometimes we need to overlook that and treat the world as if it is warm and fuzzy.....because sometimes that works. As always, well written. lydia

[Valentine]

You must like mysteries like I do..Scarry and neat way to draw the reader in..God bless valentine

[All faded blue]

I was not expecting that ending! Caught me off guard, and left me with the image in my head. Good write.

[Brianna Brie]

This left a stab in my heart. Suicide leaves behind rivers of pain. The way you form your words make even a sad piece worth reading.

[Yvonne Heidt]

Wow, this was loaded with description and suspense! Excellent descriptions, as a matter of fact! Great job Fran.

This line smacks of brilliance for me:

dark shadows and black auras ; his halo seeming so helpless...

[Diane]

Fran this was a different posting from you but one that worked very well...I am sorry i have'nt been answering any mail but I am not feeling the best at the moment..eyes are playing me up..I will read as much as i can because you do write awesom poetry...Take care..Diane

[Victoria Lee~]

Wow.. so different for you Fran... but such a hauntingly, albiet beautiful write.

[Just call me Nini]

very unexpected ending. very good read.