Mystique

 

A magic shimmer
skimmed the mystic river
beneath soft moonlit skies

 

'Twas there I discovered
a mysterious lover
completely spellboumd by his penetrating eyes

 

A man mysterious and quiet
I cannot deny it
Like still waters my love ran deep

 

'Twas love at first sight
That magical starlit night
'Alas these mystic waters now weep

 

As night grew long
into to a new rising dawn
Like a phantom my new love disappeared

 

As if into thin air
yet his presence felt near
His mystique, exciting yet weird

 

That was some time ago
But the mystic river still flows
And my soul remembers it well

 

Perhaps someday the mystery shall unfold
of secrets untold
which the mystic forever holds
but is not yet willing to tell

 

 

© 2008 Fran Marie

 

Reviews

[Nolo Segundo]

This is lovely Fran-- and congrats on your win!

[Fran Marie]

Thanks Nolo and congrats on your win also my friend

[Einstein Noodle]

fine story telling in this Fran! very much enjoy the flow and rhyme .. smooth as silk this mystic river ;) sometimes the mystery remains when people come and go seemingly to quickly for the deep emotions felt ... it always leaves me hanging ;)
E.
ps. congrats on the contest win :) its deep as an ocean for sure!

[Fran Marie]

Thanks E ever so much. I always appreciate your keen insight and thoughts on my poetry..

[Im His Daughter]

This was amazing.. great flow... very good read! Thanks for writing it!

[Baby Ricochet]

Nice rhyme & flow. Good luck with the contest

[Fran Marie]

Thanks Baby, so 've y much appreciated

[wordman]

wow,great write,no need for me to enter

[Fran Marie]

Hi Ron, thanks for stopping by, nonsense..you better enter..

[wordman]

na,but i will vote for you,how many wins do you have ?i have 6 not all first place but you know
read morena,but i will vote for you,how many wins do you have ?i have 6 not all first place but you know
the drill

[Fran Marie]

Yeah, I. Know, right? Probably around a thousand definitely not all first place..
Think I'm contest addict..lol

[wordman]

yeah,i see the feed and you get into a lot,but that`s what there for..hell my 6 sounds shy of yours

[SweetRainDrops]

Oh my god! I love it!!!! That is amazing!

[Jenna]

Wow this is great. I felt like I was in a novel that was achingly romantic. Like you meet your lover in a masquerade then he vanishes and you dont know who he is because of his mask. Its haunting and shivering. And It makes me feel like Ive been brushed on the lips by an ice cold rose

[Nancy Lee Shrader]

Congrats on your great winning poem

[A]

WOW...this is great. I love the rhyme scheam in this poem. Don't know why but it just caught me eye. Great poem! :)

[Tara Jean Olson]

such a wonderful vision:)