Softly I Slumber

Sonnet

 

 Come,read to me a poem of distant dreams
like soothing sweetness of a forest green
 
Speak to me of azure skies pale blue
paint me glimpses of rainbow's magic hue
perchance a peek of October's splendor
scattered leaves scarlett and gold surrendered
tossed whirling waves from sea dancing ashore
let me climb past pines to mountains and soar
make vague visions clear to me in mine eyes
come,tell of distant dreams I may realize
show me bits of nature,love, I implore
read,please,read me poems of beauty once more
 
While softly I slumber and stars do shine
'Lest I die wishing,a distant dream was mine
 

Reviews

[Morgan Ashire]

I knew the moment this poem's latest contest was over that you had won, my friendly rival. Congratulations. I haven't read your work for some time and I can think of no excuse why I should not have tried. You have a velvet touch with your words. I love the image this piece gave me. Its almost as if a prayer. The punctuation and spacing threw me a bit, but I caught it the second time through. Nothing a simple edit wouldn't fix. Your softness of words seem almost as breath of memories and lost lovers. Its good to read ffrom you again. I hope this finds you well.

[CarrieLynn {Chameleon A..]

wonderful read! :)

[Robert Luna]

Such a wonderful flowing piece. I loved the way this read. I could almost hear soft music playing in the back ground. Truly a pleasure to partake of.



Wonderfully Done!!!!!

[PoemRodent]

Sentiment and flow were excellent I thought. Your perception and imagery well done..

Dostani bows...

[TL Boehm]

My technical mind has left me this fine after noon - I know there is a name for this style but I can't think of it...its very 'sonnet like' and lovely. The bliss of sleep - the change of seasons - all spun into one lovely little poem. Nicely done.

[R J Askew]

enjoyed this...lots of images and thoughts packed into just the 14 lines, felt like a bigger poem which is good. and the overall sentiment behind the piece is great, too.

[Greg the Bard]

Great work that flows from the start to the finish. I love the heavy image of nature and dreams. Your style is supported by the font which fits perfect. Wonderful read

[Siddartha Beth Pierce]

Lovley, romantic write. A true delight this morning. Thank you for sharing.
Light,
Siddartha

[Carole]

Shakespeare is back! I love it. Flows with a simple ease and elegance. Love the beautiful colors lending to impeccable imagery. Hats off to you, Fran!

[The Rock And Roll Cowbo..]

Very beautiful indeed... I really don't know waht else to say... it blows me away!!

[Victoria Lee~]

Fran, this is just beautiful. You truly have a gift!

While Softly I Slumber~and stars do shine
'Lest i die wishing,distant dreams were mine


ah those regrets..so beautifully written!