Softly I Slumber

Sonnet

 

 Come,read to me a poem of distant dreams
like soothing sweetness of a forest green
 
Speak to me of azure skies pale blue
paint me glimpses of rainbow's magic hue
perchance a peek of October's splendor
scattered leaves scarlett and gold surrendered
tossed whirling waves from sea dancing ashore
let me climb past pines to mountains and soar
make vague visions clear to me in mine eyes
come,tell of distant dreams I may realize
show me bits of nature,love, I implore
read,please,read me poems of beauty once more
 
While softly I slumber and stars do shine
'Lest I die wishing,a distant dream was mine
 

Reviews

[Morgan Ashire]

I knew the moment this poem's latest contest was over that you had won, my friendly rival. Congratulations. I haven't read your work for some time and I can think of no excuse why I should not have tried. You have a velvet touch with your words. I love the image this piece gave me. Its almost as if a prayer. The punctuation and spacing threw me a bit, but I caught it the second time through. Nothing a simple edit wouldn't fix. Your softness of words seem almost as breath of memories and lost lovers. Its good to read ffrom you again. I hope this finds you well.

[Cold Coffee Magazine]

Reading this felt like sitting in a florida room over looking a causeway on a late spring day when the overhead fan suddenly decided to kick on. Did I mention Jimmy Buffet playing in the back ground and cool beverage?
This was so easy and relaxing to read. Maybe that wasn't the intent but thats what I felt so thats what I wrote.

[Hendrix]

I agree with Buffi

[T.k. Sutter]

This is beautiful. It would be something I would love to read to my children before bed. Great write!

[Buffi]

This brings such contentment and peace. Was a pleasure to read.

[Chillbear Latrigue]

I have to say that I really like your style of poetry. It is very traditional. Pretty imagery.

[Dead Angel]

wow! i love your metaphors and the description. this was a very cute poem and i enjoyed reading it. :)

[M Lamont]

Just beautiful. The last line "'Lest i die wishing,distant dreams were mine" is just haunting.

[The Truth]

a nice read.

[L.A. Ostrander]

climb pass pines - In this line I believe you meant the word 'past'. Also I noticed a couple 'I's' were not capitalized. Was this on purpose or something that needs to be corrected?

Otherwise I thought this was a beautifully written sonnet. Well done!

[Captain Blackheart (The..]

A wonderful piece fran but the last 2 lines made me feel sad...a great piece!