Stepping Stones

I've only a pittance to offer

     a swirl of dreamlike words

conjured up from the magical

     playground of my mind

                

              perhaps I imagine

you standing on a pedestal of grand measure

as i shower you with gold and luxurious gifts

hand carved in intricate detail

would that I could give all this and more...

paintings of zen gardens and sunlit meadows

azure skies smiling and green peacock feathers 

but I am not an artist of such flair

nor a builder of pedestals so grand

              nor have I the midas touch of

these treasures to bestow

           

                            No, oh no

I've only a pittance of mere words to offer

                     from my heart

and use them as stepping stones

                   hoping they find

                  their way into yours

Reviews

[Clockwork]

You've laid each stepping stone across the waters of doubt, and built a bridge to an exotic land. While we can't live on words alone, yours create quite a world for us to live in. I thoroughly enjoyed your couplet about the Zen gardens.

Your desire to build a sacred space for the special person in your life is what shines through in this poem. This is a true example of a soul who wishes to give the world to the one she cares about. Your words build a good path toward that world.

[Fran Marie]

Thanks Christian for stopping by and for thr nice comments
I do appriciatr vey much...

[Clockwork]

You're welcome!

[Riss Ryker]

Love this!! As writers, our words are the doorways to our hearts, and you have laid yours bare in this beautiful, compelling poem. My favorite line: "paintings of zen gardens and sunlit meadows
azure skies smiling and green peacock feathers" Just lovely!

[Fran Marie]

Thanks, Riss so vey much..

[Lizardo]

The last line sums it all up in this great poem
good poem, I did enjoyed reading this poem a lot
Grea work!

[Fran Marie]

Thanks Lizardo, so very much,

[Lizardo]

You're welcome!

[Cambion]

I think that honesty is a pillar of poetry just as surely as a gentle turn of phrase, careful composition, or snugly fitting metaphor. I found your poem to be a pleasant read and well supported by these pillars! Thanks for a pleasant poetic interlude.

[Fran Marie]

Thanks Cambion, so very much, I so appriciate your comments on my poetry;

[Onyia-Ali, Kingsley Chu..]

That's exactly what poet can do with words. Painting a picture from the utter most human imagination. That's when your joy of free gift is complete. Well done.

[Fran Marie]

Thanks, Onyia,so very much appriciated,

[ANTO]

I'd take a pittance like this Fran - anyday over all the materialistic goods - because I'd know it was sincere from the words and the feelings within and not just goods or baubles to buy me off.
This was a pleasure to get lost in. thanks

[Fran Marie]

Thanks, Anto so much,glad you enjoyed;

[Coyote Poetry]

I like the poem. Left reader with deep thoughts. I like the tone of the poem. Not complaining. Accepting the place we landed.
"but I am not an artist of such flair
nor a builder of pedestals so grand"
The above lines I liked. Thank you dear friend for sharing the excellent poetry. Always a pleasure to read your words.
Coyote

[Fran Marie]

Many thanks John. Much appriciated;

[Coyote Poetry]

You are welcome.

[Lydia Shutter]

How delicate and lovely your words of romance and love are, Fran Marie! To love someone is to want all that for them....to want them to feel the serenity and love you know they deserve. This is just a glorious love poem....gentle and velvety. Lydi**

[Fran Marie]

Thanks, Lydi, so very much;

[Ayvid N]

If we could have our way...we would give, give and give of ourselves till nothing remained for ourselves. That is just a woman's heart, selfless, caring and giving...

"I've only a pittance to offer

a swirl of dreamlike words

conjured up from the magical

playground of my mind"


Not a pittance...it is a treasure! I am very touched by your poetry...

[Fran Marie]

Thanks Divya, so very much, glad you enjoyed..

[The Rock And Roll Cowbo..]

The most valuable things we can give someone always come from the heart, if they do not appreciate that then they are not worthy of our love.

[Fran Marie]

Thanks Dale, so very much,

[The Rock And Roll Cowboy(REBEL WITH A CAUSE)]

You are welcome Fran.