Stepping Stones

I've only a pittance to offer

     a swirl of dreamlike words

conjured up from the magical

     playground of my mind

                

              perhaps I imagine

you standing on a pedestal of grand measure

as i shower you with gold and luxurious gifts

hand carved in intricate detail

would that I could give all this and more...

paintings of zen gardens and sunlit meadows

azure skies smiling and green peacock feathers 

but I am not an artist of such flair

nor a builder of pedestals so grand

              nor have I the midas touch of

these treasures to bestow

           

                            No, oh no

I've only a pittance of mere words to offer

                     from my heart

and use them as stepping stones

                   hoping they find

                  their way into yours

Reviews

[Clockwork]

You've laid each stepping stone across the waters of doubt, and built a bridge to an exotic land. While we can't live on words alone, yours create quite a world for us to live in. I thoroughly enjoyed your couplet about the Zen gardens.

Your desire to build a sacred space for the special person in your life is what shines through in this poem. This is a true example of a soul who wishes to give the world to the one she cares about. Your words build a good path toward that world.

[Fran Marie]

Thanks Christian for stopping by and for thr nice comments
I do appriciatr vey much...

[Clockwork]

You're welcome!

[WillaDanvers]

This is a really good poem, an abundance of great words and the right balance of said great words. Good job :)

[Fran Marie]

Thanks, Willa, so very much ☺

[Ovi-Odiete]

This is an amazing PIECE
CONGRATS ON 1ST PLACE ON MY CONTEST EMERGENCY POETRY 3

[Fran Marie]

thanks Ovi; so very much for the review and award, ever so appreciated;

[Ovi-Odiete]

You are welcome

[B. Boileau]

Pure poetic perfection. Mere words to offer ...
Thanks for sharing
bill

[Fran Marie]

A bit late..but thank you for reading and for the nice comments..

[Georgios]

Beautiful poem, Fran Marie! It flows nicely and the soothing effect of the vocabulary used is evident.

[Fran Marie]

Many thanks, I so appriciate it;

[alifeacoustic]

Beautiful words they are Fran Marie. Some treasures true value is only seen by those that share them together. I have never ever felt the urge to hug a bar of gold, or slept soundly with the warming touch of cash. The ones that mean the most are the ones you cannot measure. Superb.

[Fran Marie]

Thanks vey much, ever so appreciated...

[Indra Neil]

vivid imagery in this profound write! the metaphors are brilliant! :)

[Fran Marie]

Many thanks for reading and reviewing.much appriciated..

[Indra Neil]

u r most welcome! :)

[creative Marie]

I am glad to see this poem stray from the similar themes of previous entries in my contest. As is a challenge for most people, your poem tells a story rather than describes a story. Otherwise it is a very sweet poem, so keep up the good work. :)

[Fran Marie]

Yes, I see what you mean..thanks creative Marie, so much for reading and reviewimg..

[FateDictates]

simply beautiful...well written curtsy bow..

[Fran Marie]

Thanks, so very much

[andrew mitchell]

Fran Poetic beauty at the very top. you raise the bar so high I cannot touch or see it, the bar is beyond reach. Thanks for sharing such fine work. meanwhile I'm floored! One thing you can say about the floor...It always catches me.

[Fran Marie]

Thanks,Andrew, so much for reading and reviewing my poem,

[Benita-Staebell M - Kin..]

paintings of zen gardens and sunlit meadows

azure skies smiling and green peacock feathers




but I am not an artist of such flair

nor a builder of pedestals so grand




nor have I the midas touch of

these treasures to bestow



So beautiful and peaceful my friend.



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God bless. Benita