These~Vague Visions

 

 

Vague Visions

 

Can you not see my face?
Am I just a vague vision in dreams lost,
not even remembered in your waking hours,
cast to the side, a faded memory.

You do not even recall our distant hideaway,
our Shangrila,where once we shared our love
A lovers paradise,we knew no shame.
wrapped in rapture, so sublimely untamed.

We soared to a height beyond mere stars
that lit the heavens,into a universe so vastly divine~

A dynamic duo of fasination

Enchanted hearts and souls bursting forth into bliss
A sweet dichotomy of surreal reality
and now my love you don't even know I exist

Reviews

[Carole]

Rejection to the nth degree. I am sorry for the pain you express in this write. Thank you for sharing something that is so near and dear to your heart. I hope you found some release getting this out. You use such elegant language to describe all of this.

Some of my favorite lines are:

wrapped in rapture, so sublimely untamed.

that lit the heavens,into a universe so vastly divine~

Enchanted hearts and souls bursting forth into bliss
A sweet dichotomy of surreal reality

A dynamic duo of fasination

Thanks for taking the time to share this.

[Dilyah]

This is lovely!

[Beatrice Boyle (Grandm..]

Exquisite Fran...one of your best...bravo!

Bea

[Salvatore Buttaci]

Congratulations for winning the As--Goodbye-Descends Contest!

[pinksnowboots]

Gorgeous writing. Great job!

[Kenji Light]

Very depressing and very full of great imagery. I liked the reference to being two of a kind. "Dichotomy" and "dynamic duo of fascination" were great ways to express the one-ness that you felt with the lost lover. The ending hits hard. The last line puctures any life-preserver of hope for the hopeless romantics reading this piece. I believe that the piece itself would have more of a punch if you did not make it so apparent in the earlier stanzas that the lover has gone. If you make it seem like fond memories and then beat the reader over the head with the paddle of realization I believe the work would have more of an impact.

[Everett DeValle]

Shangrila, lovely, I was going to use that ....LOL, alright you beat me too it. Fran, your poem is exquisite, with words softly enchanting your readers. At times, aren't we all invisible in the end? Yet memories linger to those moments that once existed. Delightful read. ~Ev

[PoemRodent]

This is a grand piece of expression with much flow and sentiment. Your projection of your inner feelings were well tendered in a deep way. I enjoyed this and moving it to my favorites.

Hats Off to you...

Love and Thoughts,

Dostani