Part of Paradise~Sonnet~

`` Part of Paradise``

                                 
Let me put the stars back into thine eyes
and fill thy long and lonely nights with love
Let me bring to thee some part of paradise
something of heaven's bliss from up above
Let me wrap thy soul 'round a milky moon
turning dark shadows into new white light
I'll embrace thy heart and heal deepest wounds
chasing thy cold fears to a warm clear night
No more shall fog or clouds hang in the sky
as a thousand bright stars shine into view
Nevermore,shall you wish swiftly to die
let me show how much love I have for you
Yes, I'll put the stars back into thine eyes
and I shall bring thee, part of paradise
                          

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Let mine eyes drink a sky of stars with you
paradise big dipper shall fill love's cup
Eclipsing much more than a full moon's view
A lion's share of the heavens above
shall be ours as we dance the milkyway
Let us drink of the star's dazz'ling bright light
bask in the glow of paradise display
Let us embrace love, deep into the night
yes,we shall share a paradise divine
love's bliss 'til an eternity of time
I'll give unto thee ev'rything which is mine
and let thy soul drink in the stars sublime
I'll sip with you heart's wine from gods of love
and give thee part of paradise above

 

Reviews

[SM Davis]

Eclipsing much more than a full moon's view
A lion's share of the heavens above
shall be ours as we dance the milkyway
Let us drink of the star's dazz'ling bright light
bask in the glow of paradise display

FRAN!!!!! Oh my!!! yes, basking in the glow of paradise display....this is again a true display of your many wonders in writing. You've grown so much ... your abilities seem boundless as you stretch your romantic wings. Absolutely stunning.

[Helen Crutchett]

Fran Marie, this is a wonderful Sonnet. Thank you for entering into the Challenge!

Good luck!

Helena

[Fran Marie]

Thanks, Helena, so very much appriciated;

[Matching Socks]

This has to be one of the most beautiful love poems I have read. It's wonderful. I'm so glad I saw it on the wire.

[Fran Marie]

Thanks Ana..so very much Appriciated

[Gleb Zavlanov]

Absolutely beautiful! So stunning and rich and sweet. Amazing job!

[Fran Marie]

thanks so very much;

[Gleb Zavlanov]

No problem.

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"let me wrap thy soul 'round a milky moon
turning dark shadows into new white light
I'll embrace thy heart and heal deepest wounds
chasing thy cold fears to a warm clear night"

{God--you always write the most lovely imagaistic lines}

"I'll give unto thee ev'rything which is mine
and let thy soul drink in the stars sublime
I'll sip with you heart's wine from gods of love
and give thee part of paradise above"

{Like a dream--a sweet dream--Beautiful Poem!!!}

james:-)

[Nish Nish the Fish]

This is beautiful, you have masterful imagery and your words touched my soul, and that of the person this is dedicated to as well i'm sure. Well done! I like the Shakespearean language, it gave the poem a unique spin and allowed it to stand out, thank you for entering my contest :)

[Nancy Lee Shrader]

Congrats on your great winning Sonnet. Well Done!

[Tara Jean Olson]

my dear, i have been away from writerscafe for a month or two, and you have improved your work!
it is true that we are all fellow poets in search of inspiration, and other poetic styles that allow us to expand our visions. i have observed this shakespearen style poetry, but i think that fear has prevented me from pursuing it. good job!

[Gathering_Stars]

I"m generally bitter about reading poems about love because nowadays it seems like love has been kidnapped and replaced by a cheap, plastic commercialized version sponsored mostly by petty insecure high schoolers. That being said well-done. I found this piece extremely captivating and moving.

Thanks

[Shellie]

Dear Fran,
Thanks for submitting this to my contest 'Stirring the soul'. It was everything I was looking for and more. The imagery is so fantastic, like a journey through space and time on a carpet strung together with threads of love. I love all of it, its a fantastic sonnet and if i had to tell you face to face what i think id be 'ah uh am', lost for words i was!!!! Uplifting, soul stirring, heartening and more.....
CONGRATULATIONS!!!! And I am honoured to have read such a beautiful piece.

[These Haunted Hallways]

This is such a beautifully-romantic love poem that definitely made me warm inside hehe. Unbelievably romantic. Perfect and flawless. The imagery and mood in the piece is so beautiful. Lovely olde words that really made it even more specially-romantic. Everything came together in the piece. It was definitely meant for two ;) Great Work!!

B.A.