Dialogue of Darkness

Looking to my heart for answers

 

      ' tis but to chase an empty dream

for the heart ~she only knows how to lie

                               

                       to safeguard feelings..

protection tucked inside

her safety valve ever so neatly

                       secrets kept within each beat

I seek to converse with her

   about things such as love

                         

                   ah, but the heart she is in denial..

she pretends not to hear

            for to speak of these things

                              

                          sends shivers of sadness

as loneliness resides there~

she has  no voice

 nor conversation left

                                    within

  her private chambers

and her only response is

                             a dialogue of darkness

                       

                 

Reviews

[ANTO]

"for the heart ~she only knows how to lie
to safeguard feelings..
protection tucked inside
her safety valve ever so neatly
secrets kept within each beat" - I was really gripped by this - years ago I read that the heart has some neurons and its considered a type of brain. This poem has really fired my imangination Fran - the heart is so often portrayed as victim not a co-conspirator - its a brilliant unique take (well to me anyway).
I love the intrigue in this one.

[Fran Marie]

Thanks Anto.. so vey much.. soo glad you enjoyed this one.

[Poetic Beauty]

Loneliness is hard on the soul and sometimes a loss can cause people to block out love and compassion from other.

[Fran Marie]

many thanks , Kristina...

[myself]

This is really nice. You put it very well, and I especially liked this part:

"for to speak of these things

sends shivers of sadness
as loneliness resides there~

she has no voice
nor conversation left
within
her private chambers

and her only response is
a dialogue of darkness"

I've seen this in women so many times, but I don't remember seeing it expressed so well in such a short poem. I enjoyed it and the two ending lines are really powerful.

[Fran Marie]

thanks so very much;

[Hawkmoon]

great constructed descent of poetic energies, a perfect finishing line!

now, write the dialogue in Three Voices?!!

[Fran Marie]

Thanks so much for reading..it's a possibility..perhaps the soul should shed some light

[Riss Ryker]

This poem spoke volumes to me like no poem has in quite a while. When your in this 'state' of darkness, and live behind the walls, loneliness is a tangible, living thing that entwines its way in and around and through your heart. This poem, thought tinged with sadness, is hauntingly beautiful. Thank you for sharing and voicing how others feel.

[Fran Marie]

Many thanks..so appriciated

[wordman]

a beautiful but sad write fran marie

[Fran Marie]

Thanks, Ron, so very much,

[Bare Trees]

How can I compete with emmajoy and Keegan's reviews? They said it all so eloquently in such nice detail that I feel inadequate now. :) But anyway, I loved the poem and the sullen mood it evokes.

[Fran Marie]

You don't have to compete when reviewing. Nor feel inadequate Tim, there are no right or wrong reviews imo ... I so appriciate your review..I'm thankful my poetry is read

[KeeD]

I feel the hollow vessel of the organ that beats love, the whispers scream joy. If the walls of this hollow heart could speak, it'd tell us great stories of love, loss and pain. Only to beat to that tune over and over again. Eventually the rhythm stops and the beat is no more, the whispers get chocked with blood and the heart never told stories again. Such a great poem. I can relate to this poem, I can feel myself just resent the idea of love, not because I don't want people to feel it, it's because after the war of a life i've faced I don't believe I deserve it or it deserves me which ever way that works. I'm truly a fan of this write.

[Fran Marie]

Thanks so very much, Keegan.much appriciate your reading my poem;

[Coyote Poetry]

I love your poetry. I have been reading the ancient poets in 2014. Your poetry had the feel of the poets who loved the word.she has no voice
"nor conversation left
within
her private chambers"
You can say so much using so few words. I liked how you led to the ending. Sometime we need to figure out what we need and want in the privacy of mind and place. Thank you for sharing the excellent poetry.
Coyote

[Fran Marie]

Awhh. Thanks for your kind review..I so appricisate your reading my poetry..

[Coyote Poetry]

You are welcome.

[Confuser]

What a beautiful poem. You are a very good writer. I am amazed at your words. Thank you so much!

[Fran Marie]

Many thanks, Dale..glad you enjoyed..

[Confuser]

All true, thanks Fran. Loved it.

[Matching Socks]

Each chamber has it's own key, to be unlocked when ready.
Beautiful poem Fran Marie.

[Fran Marie]

Thanks Ana, so very much;