`Mercy~Her Sigh`

My Sonnet based on Ophelia from Shakespears "Hamlet" Her thoughts as she lay dying

 

 

She sighs his name with her last dying breath

he her wind in the ashes of death

she pleadsby faint light of sad blishish moon

bellowing mercy~her departure soon

her shadowed soul death may escort from pain

her spirit has died as willows weep in the rain

life intolerable,misery doth claim

she grieves and does think herself quite insane

now quietly she slips into a watery grave

relaesing her soul to the winds of space

she conceded with saddened heavy heart

Mercy appealed~oh that gods do their part

yes,'tis but glory which doth await in death

and his name she did sigh,with last dying breath

Reviews

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The great old spirit of romanticism � so many people are confused here, think romanticism is that happy go lucky thing about fluffy valentine's day presents � if only they read Goethe � Romanticism � the almighty omnipresence of nature: including that Saturnian revelation that upon the dying breath there flows a moment of eternity �

[Amanda Crandall]

oohhh classically written I like that! Well done!

[Carrie Montgomery]

poor, poor, Ophelia!
This was awesome. You are so good! solid rhythm, even tones...really polished, almost perfect writing.

[M Lamont]

Love the whole flow of this piece. Sad topic, but I like that the best! Great job.

[Siddartha Beth Pierce]

Just beautiful. Gripping description and tale all in one. Simple and elegant. Thank you for sharing.
Light,
Siddartha

[Ismael Rodriguez Jr.]

wonderfully written sonnet.

[Jenny Davis]

I love how you stuck to the genre of the original story in this piece! It is so eloquently written and really boasts your creativity and ability to step inside a character's shoes...extremely well written, Fran!

[Angelheaded Hipster]

"Get thee to a nunnery!" Sorry...I simply could not resist....This was an excellent writing on Ophelias suspected suicide. There is so much to wonder about that...was she killed, or did she jump? No one knows really for sure, since it happened off screen....
But this...this is just beautiful!! Thank you for sending this my way...the words, the font...everything...I really enjoyed it.

[Autumn Dawn Gorny]

a very"in your face" poem the dying delcaration is truely felt.

[Debra Stevens Edwards (..]

I get the feeling that this is another piece about Ophelia. I read one earlier for the same contest. They are both every good I like this sonnet. I thought that this was a perfect ending to this tradgic life. Well done.
Debby

[Robert Luna]

So many wonderful lines that i wish I had written. I love the imagery that flowed so purposefully and seamless like water a drift. The sadness that was entangled among such beautiful words was inspiring to witness and be a part of. This is one of those pieces that lay in your mind long after you finish read them.


Wonderfully Done!!!!