Soft Surrender

Running towards the darkened sky,

            

   shadows casting sadness upon my face

                 why, oh why,

 are we fighting again?

                 a foolish thing to do,

is it not?

          Hoping to find answers to ease the heartache

                              

                  this agonizing  pain and anger felt

and turn the sharper edge of love's fate

              into soft surrender

of  a sun-filled destiny

             meant for two lovers 

 to share

               

Reviews

[Clockwork]

I like the idea of reconciling differences, becoming a unified couple.The two lovers in your poem come a long way from the first stanza. From bitter fights to selfless unity.

Our lovers are most often our deepest friends and confidants, guardians against the injuries of the world. Your lines "a sun-filled destiny/meant for two lovers/to share" are a great way to describe that union. We are so much more when we overcome the differences in our relationships.

[Fran Marie]

Thanks, Christian; So much appreciated ..

[Coyote Poetry]

"Hoping to find answers to ease the heartache
this agonizing pain and anger felt
and turn the sharper edge of love's fate
into soft surrender"
When we pass a certain point in anger. If no-one surrender. No-one will win. Wisdom in these words. I learn from tripping in negative words. Silence is better than negative words. Thank you dear Poet for the excellent poetry.
Coyote

[Fran Marie]

thanks John, i so appreciate your review;

[Coyote Poetry]

You are welcome. Always a pleasure to read your words.

[AprilRN1210]

emotion overrules rationality a lot of the time (at least for me) and makes that searching for those answers even more difficult.. we all want that "sun-filled destiny" shared with the one that resides in our heart.. real life isn't all sunshine and rainbows as you highlight here, but with patience, communication, and faith--then hopefully it can have bright, warm rays that encompass you both the majority of it.. another beautiful write Fran..

On a side note, stumbled a little in the beginning, not sure if it is supposed to be "darkened", but flowed better in my head that way :)

[Fran Marie]

you're always so spot on in your reviews, so insightful you are, thanks April. you're probably right about darken vrs darkened . . glad you caught that,,

[AprilRN1210]

it is always such a pleasure to read your works girl, you are more than welcome.. and glad I could help:)
made me smile, thank you.. I just write what you make me feel..

[jacob erin-cilberto]

that pain and anger so often interfere with the laughter and love that could be had.

yes, fighting doesn't accomplish anything and is quite foolish.

[Fran Marie]

yes, that it is...thanks Jacob, so very much;