` Sea of Lost Love`

your charm has faded

    the lure has surfaced 

     to float away

to a distant shore

in an instant~ no more

than the

 depth of a heartbeat

 

 a soul's breath

faint waves left

washed up

   to disappear and dissolve

     into a sea of lost love

      

           

  

Reviews

[AprilRN1210]

the way you started this one was so perfect... it stirred up those waves that came crashing into the sea of love and then washing away, eroding the fantasy one bit at a time, fading off into the distance as you hear the other waves doing the same... very moving.. the construction of this is exquisite paired with the powerful lines and emotion that you are able to portray beautifully... one of my favorites...

[Fran Marie]

Thanks April, so very much appreciate your review, glad you enjoyed my poem];

[andrew mitchell]

"into a sea of lost love "made me reflect on this write and to say , absolute magic in form and imagery

[Benita-Staebell M - Kin..]

than the

depth of a heartbeat






a soul's breath

faint waves left







washed up

to disappear and dissolve

into a sea of lost love


Simply lovely and mysteriousness
feel to it.



Nicely penned my friend.


Thank you for sharing and thank you for
your kind review and comments left on my page.

blessings. Benita

[Fran Marie]

Thanks Benita...so very much,

[Benita-Staebell M - KindredPoet]

You're welcome.

[MomzillaNC]

Such drifting sadness… you captured that cresting wave when we're "falling in love" and the undertow when it pulls away.

[Fran Marie]

Thanks so very much;

[MomzillaNC]

You're welcome.

[ayesha gupta]

nice and short. it will hit max views. :)

[Fran Marie]

Thanks, so much

[Baby Ricochet]

Love the last stanza. Good one

[Fran Marie]

thanks so much;

[Rene Salinas]

Boy, Fran Marie if it would have been me , I would have been swearing at her calling her all names under the sun. Yet you rise above and althought the words might seem to sway gently from side to side as if the emotional content was not to overwhelm anyone or insult anyone the message it is still conveyed loud and clear. The sea of lost love might be close to that sea where many relations that have experienced the trials and tribulations can swim.

It requires control to create this calm.

Thankyou

[Fran Marie]

Thanks Rene ; for your great review...I so appreciate it

[Tate Morgan]

The longing for what might have been here. makes you wonder why we do what we do But we cannot help ourselves That for every joy there is an equal heartache and pain

[Fran Marie]

so true~ Thanks Tate; so very much appreciateed ;

[The Rock And Roll Cowbo..]

They say love is forever, but sometimes love is only meant to come for just a special moment in time… love the wording and the structure adds to the impact of your verses.

[Fran Marie]

thanks Dale, so vey much appreciate it;

[The Rock And Roll Cowboy(REBEL WITH A CAUSE)]

You are most welcome Fran.

[Coyote Poetry]

Amazing use of description. Artwork and word led the reader to the sad ending. Hard to find love when it had disappeared in the current of the sea never to be found again. Thank you for sharing the excellent poetry.
Coyote

[Fran Marie]

thanks John~ so very much;

[Coyote Poetry]

You are welcome dear friend.

[Vito]

Excellent stuff right here and love the way it drew me in.

[Fran Marie]

thanks Vito, so vey much;