My tell tale heart~

sonnet

Shall I bare my soul showing rather bold

  wearing emotions on my tell tale heart sleeve

or remain aloof pretense of love grown cold

  keeping feelings at bay~ perhaps just leave

Hide in silence as darkness drifts in deep

  whilst damp fog seeps within sealing love's fate

or fight the good fight~ let someone else weep

  release impulses lest it be too late

O' if only love's flame were naught to blind

  and its game be dealt and played with such ease

to safeguard fragile heart, yet tis unkind

  alas cold winds breathe low, gone is love's breeze

   

  Therefore I bare my heart and soul to rhyme

     To gain love's balm ~ tis a matter of time

Reviews

[PloughBoy]

Naturally, Fran Marie, I saw your alluring title, then exclaimed, "Yes! Edgar Allen Poe time!" I was not disappointed either, for you've captured his essence in your eloquent wording of this lovely, melancholy verse.

Excellent work. This is going into my library, and will be the first one to do so.

Bravo!

[Fran Marie]

Oh my ..thanks for the great review and library add..so glad you enjoyed this sonnet, I so appreciate it;

[PloughBoy]

The pleasure was all mine, Fran Marie. You are most welcome. :)

[Coyote Poetry]

I loved the complete poem.
"O' if only love's flame were naught to blind
and its game be dealt and played with such ease
to safeguard fragile heart, yet tis unkind
alas cold winds breathe low, gone is love's breeze"
The above lines. Endearing and wonderful dear Fran. Thank you for sharing the outstanding poetry.
Coyote

[Fran Marie]

thanks dear John
I. s o appreciate
your thoughts
and kind words;

[Coyote Poetry]

Was my pleasure and you are welcome dear Fran.

[R.E. Ray]

Fran, I see you wrote this one long before I joined the Cafe. Sorry I missed it. Though I've tried writing sonnets, they land with a dull thud. I applaud your success here. This is a beautiful write and seems form perfect (at least to this free verse writer). I love the artwork, too. Remarkable piece, Fran.

[Fran Marie]

thanks dear Robert
for your kind words
on m y poetry.
I so appreciate;

[R.E. Ray]

You’re welcome, Fran.

[Chris]

So few reach out - even when it is all an other ever dreams of - their being ever reached for...

[Fran Marie]

Soo true
Chris..thanks
for reading and
your thoughts
on this one.;

[James Paranormal]

Deep and defining words, of romance, and classic beauty, heartache, and the pain of love. Wonderfully crafted.

[Fran Marie]

thanks lost coast
for reading and
kind words
on m y poetry;

[Crowley]

I say bare it!!!! This is great question you ask. I think too many go the cold route to regret it later on, I say run hot, stay hot, and let whoever will listen have it with both barrels. Great piece!!!

[Fran Marie]

Hi Crowley..thanks
for your review.
I agree hot and staying
hot is good lol..
shooting on all sixes
here.;

[Einstein Noodle]

killer third verse says i! love the question raised .. love .. never gets old does it ;) so many angles, corners and spheres ... i would say ... do fight the good fight .. hearts turned so cold would be a harsh and lonely place, i think ... old English doesn't always work but in this i think it fits perfectly ... kind of wish V1 had a bit more of it as well ...love your character as she muses ... hurt and withdrawn .. faced with a fork in the road ... give up, grow cold or face the pain and walk through it to find the gold :) i was drawn into "My tell tale heart" ... of course the title is a fine hook and i don't think your borrowing it would displease that old dark soul one bit ... read it several times for more flavor and got it each time ...peace and joy
E.
ps. is that your drawing? it is perfect fit with your poem says i!

[Fran Marie]

Hi. E..glad you
enjoyed and true
love never gets old
it's forever there to
read moreHi. E..glad you
enjoyed and true
love never gets old
it's forever there to
to be found .glad you
enjoyed the flavors
extracted. from each
read.
..7hanks s o vey
much for reviewing

[Neville]

I have never dared to try and attempt such a write as this, let alone a sonnet... excellently penned & bloomin true........... Neville

[Fran Marie]

Thanks so vey much..I so appreciate your reviews

[Neville]

Then I must away and pen some more......

[Gee]

Mmmmmmmmm, I try to write poetry, you achieve. Beautifully penned

[Fran Marie]

Thanks Gee for reading, so appriciate It

[Gee]

It was a pleasure

[barleygirl]

So many things to admire & comment on! Great alliteration & rhyme: "darkness drifts in deep whilst damp fog seeps" . . . but also I love that you can craft a sonnet without any sensations that form comes in front of relating your message poignantly. I also love your central idea, being transparent in our word pictures, & the way you've carried this idea thru-out, gracefully & with clarity.

[Fran Marie]

Thanks,barleygirl, ever so much appriciate your kind reviews on my poetry..

[one sky]

Very emotive but beautifully written. I admire poets who can write sonnets. For me it is the most complicated poetry form for you have to consider many aspects. You're great! This is excellent.

[Fran Marie]

thanks Em, I so appreciate it..