The Darkside of Love

 

 

 

 

The beat of a broken heart
is stopped,with no blood left to flow
Tears no longer slide from eyes that cried,
with no hurt left to show

It's a slippery slide into
The Darkside.
A termination of love inside


An ending to all my emotions
'Tis no valid value of love,for me to feel,
Erased, is my ability to love
Cupid's poison-dipped arrow,slid in to kill.

Causing a slippery slide into
The Darkside.
A discrimination of love's pride.


Shielded is my useless heart
Blockaded is my empty mind
Both of which have slipped apart
within a matter of fleeting time.

Making a slippery slide into
The Darkside.
A reservation for love to hide.

Due to empty promises and words
A heartache will be no more
An end to problems,that made love absurd
My heart deleted all aspects which made it sore.

Just a slippery slide into
The Darkside
A destination where only a broken love can abide.
 
 
 
 

 

Reviews

[chloe cruz]

This was amazingly well-written, and I could relate to it so well, it took my breath away. Thank you for entering this into The Heart's Demise... and congratulations on a winning poem. Hehe.

"Just a slippery slide into
The Darkside
A destination where only a broken love can abide."

The ending was fantastic, and my favorite verse... most beautiful, heart-felt, etcetra.

Chloe.

[Temperance]

Oh….I can relate to this and, it is a slippery slide to the dark side. I would love again once I get over this one. This is so very nicely written. Great read. Thank you! Temp

[Tricessimus]

Cupid's poisoned arrow is a beautiful turn of phrase, so apt a metaphor that I'm amazed to have never read it before. This poem flows as serenely and surely as the Mississippi with all of its breadth and darkness. It has a mood and tone that I can feel coming out of my own mouth. Well done.

[Einstein Noodle]

i like your opening verse the best ..the weeping that can empty a person and make void all the life that love brought is graphic ..i felt my heart lips and throat parch ...i am not sure the cliche' strengthens your poem .. so each repetition tweeks it again ..... probably just me ;} the darkness makes it somber ...a requiem ..and i love your closing line ..so true ..it is a special place for broken hearted people ...we sit quietly devoid of most emotion ...waiting ...good luck in the competition Fran
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[Fran Marie]

Thanks so very much..

[Coyote Poetry]

"The beat of a broken heart
is stopped,with no blood left to flow
Tears no longer slide from eyes that cried,
with no hurt left to show"
The poem is amazing. You led the reader into pain and hidden memories. I like the strong statements making the reader get a vision of a hard and painful situation. A outstanding poem.
Coyote

[Keriun]

I love how it rhymed so well :D IT WAS AWESOME overall x)

[Patches I'm not so new..]

This is a wonderfully written poem the imagery is fantastic the subject well the subject is all too faimiler to me so I can empathise with the persona of the piece again an outstanding write!

[Nancy Lee Shrader]

Congrats on your great winning poem. Well Done!

[The Lone Wolf Prose]

I love this! I hear music as I read this. This would be such an excellent song as well. The heartache is all to familiar for me; utterly acute and piercing...

"Just a slippery slide into
The Darkside
A destination where only a broken love can abide."

The way you used the repetition in the poem was brilliant as it just felt like you were whittling everything down to that pandoric, horrendous, unavoidable truth. The stinging feel of being alone becomes melded to the Darkness. Almost as if you are consumed by that one thing: Darkness. Love becomes synonymous with all that that abyss stands for; contradiction of its usual connotation of zealous, passionate, rose-colored lens fanciful.

"Shielded is my useless heart
Blockaded is my empty mind
Both of which have slipped apart
within a matter of fleeting time."

My favorite lines. It reminds me of the isolation and the futility that seems to penetrate even what seemed a stronghold at a time but in the face of Love is useless. Tears my heart up in the worst of ways: in a beautiful way.
Your work is such an inspiration and so masterfully sculpted! Thank you for sharing...

[Michael Kerr]

great write here. i myself am hurt. hurt by two engagements. the poem here hurt to read, for it brought many feeling of pain and loss. but i loved your poem, for i can relate. great job.
-mike kerr-